A small puff of vapor,
Breathed birth from the ebony sky,
With milky crystal arms and legs,
That float, flutter and fly; fly!
Angelically radiant in every swift stride,
Perfectly synchronized with every flickering flop,
Ultimately elegant in every circular ringlet,
As they swirl and spiral, non stop.
And when the wind billows,
The flakes furiously bolt; bolt!
Fiercely cluttering, to and fro,
Rocketing into a brawling jolt.
And when the sea of air blows slow; slow;
The falling flakes dance, gaily,
And they mildly rock back and forth
Like the gentle strum of a ukulele.
As the world, rapidly, keeps its rotation,
The snowflake dangles, dribbles, and drapes,
Awaiting its destiny of defrosting on the grasses,
Yet, hopeful of a possible way to escape.
The exquisite flake is swaying, soothingly.
And sluggishly sinking, sinking, sinking,
Coming closer to the verdant bed below,
And finally shrinking, shrinking, shrinking.
Author notes
This was for an AP English project. Write an Ode/Ballad. I'm still a little unsure about it, and I know that it has a lot of grammatical issues, but for a rough draft, tell me what you think! :]
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Comments
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Oh my gosh your poem makes me want to... want to just play with snowflakes
. I really love your poem. I really do. Thanks for entering my contest and I hope you do well in my contest.
-Jess
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Wow, this is so stunning!
I love the imagery you create here, it's a very beautiful shot of winter!
Good flow overall.
Bravo!
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Very Cute
This is a very nice piece. Your repetition works very well with it. Your vocabulary is also very nice. Not too simple but not too complex. Nicely done and thank you for entering! -
I love the repetition and the blatant imagery. This was a pleasant read. It is snowing right now where I am, so this was almost a perfect poem for the occasion. Awesome job and good luck in my contest!
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