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Unknown Life

my life has always been hard
after years of wodering about my scars
i come to find i might die
my heart was broken(literaly)
and they cut me open at 2 months
then close me up
now years later i come to find
its still broken
and now i could die
even as i type my life can end
i can be as healthy as all hell and still die because my broken heart
asking my darkest time
my answer is
everyday is my darkest

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my darkest time

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  • zatog
    November 4

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    perfect poem, because it could mean that you literately had a broken hear, or a broken heart from love. and hey man, Daniel, I'm still here, so don't go dieing or i will have to raise you from the dead and kill you my self!!! lol


  • Yemassee gold member
    November 1

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    Is all of this true? Were you operated on at two months and are you in such a dire state that you could die at any time? If it's true, I am sorry. Either way, I wish you well.


  • Blood N Tears
    August 25

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    Theres a lot of feeling in this it seems like. Beautiful words my friend. Keep it up.
    ♥Lillie♥


  • Walls-within
    May 1

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    This is beautiful. I think that when every day is your darkest you wonder which way is the light? You try to pretend you are ok, but you aren't. sad that you feel so alone, and that you have a broken heart.


  • hellsbaby
    April 3

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    i think its beautifully written...
    I feel kinda sad,cause once a heart is broken it can never truly be glued back together.there's always just a tiny part missing............


  • XxAmongtheBrokenxX
    February 15
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    Wow, you painted the perfect image of sadness in these 14 lines. Very good, indeed.


  • dead soul 666
    February 15
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    good job, heh just like how i feel


  • Wulfys Broken Wings
    January 15
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    awww *hugs* ive felt the same way and still do i understand where ur coming from


  • Manda-Lou
    December 11, 2008

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    You forgot the N in "wondering". There are also a few more mistakes if you'd like me to show you. Aside from that it was well done. I wish you well in my contest


  • Beauty Of Silence
    December 10, 2008

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    this is really deep and very heart-felt. i'm so sorry you had to go through that when you were just a kid. this poem was well expressed. simple, yet it reached out to many. keep the faith alive its a brilliant write

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