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My face, as pale as moon through misted night
is looked upon with judgment in your eyes
and with each measured verse that you recite
the pealing of the bell cannot disguise.
Deeds tainted, breaking rules as I observe
the precipice of life on which I crawl
with soiled hands and rosary to serve
while fate relays expulsion's numbing pall.
And I, a mortal man who lives for light
lies branded from cold ritual of shame.
My embers cooling with the rise of night
as each toll serves to nullify my name.
I languish with my anguished writhing soul;
aspersions cast to crucify the whole.
Author notes
Subject- Bell book and candle
In a list
A contest entry
- Shakespearean Sonnets by masterblaster.
6500 points, ended December 14, 2008, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is beautifully written.
Although I'm of a different faith, I do believe this is something that anyone devoted to Catholicism can relate to on a deeply personal level. As always, Pamela, your writing leaves me with a smile that endures.
Soon, I will be learning to write sonnets. There is an elegance to this form that I find appealing.
Don
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Thank you Don.
I am not Catholic either however, the contest specs called for relation to this denomination. I am pleased you enjoyed this sonnet. One of my better ones I think. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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You're welcome, Pamela.
You definitely did a wonderful job relating to Catholicism. That's one of the things I enjoy most about your writing, which is your ability to adapt to the prompt. Your words never feel forced in the least. They seem to just fall into place. I continue to find your work inspirational.
Don
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Wonderfully expressed.
Congrats on the Bronze.
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Thank you. ~Pamela
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This is very beautiful, Loved each line, for each word is measured and works. The imagery of this, is striking, and I enjoyed this reading very much.
Congrats on the much deserved trophy!
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Thank you so much for your kind words. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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Hi, lovely sonnet, a pleasure to read, Di
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Di
Thank you for your kind comment, the honor of bronze and the opportunity to write. Very much appreciated. An excellent contest. ~Pamela
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Also a wonderful sonnet. Was it as effortless to write as it was to read?
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Thank you so much. I am pleased you enjoyed this. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Exceptional. Beautifully crafted and presented.
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Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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The penitential tone of this sonnet was perfect. This interesting prompt allows us to view sin, shame and banishment from many perspectives and the one you chose is heartbreaking. The final couplet with its internal rhyme is memorable and a fitting conclusion to a master work. You are such gifted poet, able to compose wonderful verse in any form. I am pleased to be your student and learn from your example. Peace, Liz
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Thank you Liz. I appreciate your kind comments here and my I extend hearty congrats to you on the honor of silver. A truly award winning piece in my eyes. Well done. ~Pamela
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Nice Pam
Sad but well crafted.
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Thank you Jim. It is always a pleasure to see your comments on my verse. Thank you. ~Pamela
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In a word: masterful.
All the best Pamela,
With much love,
mj.
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Thank you. ~Pamela
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This is such an exellent piece of poetry.
I just love your sonnets BEAUTIFUL
The third stanza is incredible Wow
And the line
"I languish with my anguished writhing soul;"
Wonderfully done indeed, best of wishes to you always.
Tony
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Thank you so much for your kind words on this sonnet. I am so pleased you enjoyed it. ~Pamela
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