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I- The Moon.

I am Moon, I tell the owls.

And I am
Hung between
The ‘Down to Earth’ and
The ‘sky’.

Although I know, I shine
Beautifully. Though I know
How beautiful I am,
Yet I was always welcomed
by a world of sleeping audience,
my grace always ignored,

I live in this night
And this shows I learned
my lessons, by my heart.

I know how to show up, even in dark,
And how not to show up, even In light.

I was the moon, I tell the sparrows.

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  • aboomer silver member
    June 10
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    lovely feel to this - and I like the underlying message.
    nicely done - I enjoyed this.

  • pelo801
    December 21, 2008

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    i like the message i got from this one. do what you do and do it well, even if no one appreciates it.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    December 12, 2008

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    I really like the way you have written this with the contrast between the beginning and the ending - nicely done the owls and sparrows were my favorite parts of this - well done!

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • Dragonbabyx3 gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    Beautifully written! I love how you tell this from the moons perspective. Thankyou for entering my contest and Good Luck!