Sally climbed from her bed
up draperies to the moon
and this is what she said
so big and bright
you shine to night
in nursery rhymes
you are so jolly
so why to me
these horrid teeth
just like a crocodile?
Said moon looked
down through the clouds
his ugly frown
whispered child
I will take you away tonight
Screams did parents awake
it was too late
open window
tattered drapes
Man in the moon
did smile
as he dropped
Sally in Potter's Field.
Author notes
coloring in my world
Sally Sally Sally silly girl...
A contest entry
- The Moon by Dragonbabyx3.
1000 points, ended December 23, 2008, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congrats on your contest win of 1000 points! Great write!
p.s. Somehow I came in 8th out of 28. Did not even think I'd get that. All of the entries are really good though. Kudos to you!
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That is a moon from the dark side of the family
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Yike!
I thought I was going to read a nice bedtime poem here! 
This is dark & a bit gruesome. Poor Sally...now I'm going to go to bed & have nightmares! 
I'm sure you'll do well in the Contest. All the best... 
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Oh my goodness
This is truly a wicked write what a dream she had
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I love the unexpected in poetry. The mundane drives me a bit insane. LOL Your poetry is filled with fantasy and skill. Very finely crafted work here poet. I smiled at the crocodile. LOL I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Silly Sally went on quite the flight of fancy, didn't she? Some see love when they gaze at the moon, others oft see...something else. Beware the nights of the darkling moon.
You did indeed color your world in a little more with this one, going off in a new direction I think. This was dark, with a sprinkling of humor as well, I like!
Is that Carolina moon still shining over you, my beautiful green-eyed girl? Tell me what you see when you look at it, will you?
Love, Brazos
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Well done! Silly Sally should have known better!
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T his is so sweet, what would we be like if we could not write about the beautiful moon in the sky, this is sad but yet hopeful
good luck
Voe
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some twisted depth there!
Loved every shocking, word. well written with a catchy flow. great job!
Love and light
RF
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Don't mess with that man in the noon.
Joe
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Wow, Twisted awesomeness! I love it, gives a whole new depth to the man in the moon! A bit homicidal maybe lol. I loved it nevertheless! THankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!
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The man in the moon is homicidal? AAAAHHHHH!
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I think that this is very sweet made me smile good luck to you in the contest best wishes always be well.
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