A frantic chase across a frozen lake
Zig...
Zagging, this way, and that
Eluding the hunters
Bone crushing impact
As a soft speckled flank hits hard ice
Warm red blood on cold white crystals
The pack draws in
Sharp teeth tear warm flesh.
The wolves play lupine games
Kicking up the soft powder snow
Chasing each other in circles
Long muzzles nuzzle warm thick fur
Forming lifelong bonds
A single wolf gives a mournful howl
The sound carries, on the cold air.
Your voice echoes back
Between the stands of aspen, birch and pine
Crisp and clear as new fallen snow
A world away from this wilderness
You walk the frozen city streets.
Resting on a fallen pine
Camera focused on the pack
I feel the chill cold of your distain
Your song returns to haunt me
As high in an Aspen tree, a jaybird squawks
Strident, urgent, emotive
Reminding me of a riff from your harmonica
...but that was yesterday.
Now, as the orange winter sun sinks low
The pack begin to move
Gracefully bounding through the deep drifts
Leaving tracks that I must follow
Tracks that will, forever
... lead me away from your love.
Author notes
This poem is dedicated to Elvira, a fine musician.
A contest entry
- Your Favorite Work? by RedAquarius.
550 points, ended January 27, 2009, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Mm'kay. It's Free-verse Time :] by Sunkissed xo.
400 points, ended February 19, 2009, 68 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I'm here to learn, you are all poets so I respect your criticism.
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Again you amaze me. I've run out of words to describe how beautiful I find your poetry. The emotion felt in this one is fantastic. I've added you to my favorites - because you have captured sustained interest in your poetry. I look forward to reading more.
~ Lee -
Emotive
Beautiful contrast between love and the wild.
Pamela
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Checkout the u-tube video that inspired this, "Winter's Sun" by my musical muse elviradark6
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I will...
when I get back to work, My computer here cannot download such files. So when I'm on my break I'll check it out!
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A very vivid & stirring write here. I like how you focused on nature and the wolves and then went on to write about the person in the poem.
Good work
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I still love this title, it connotates romance and primal forces together. In stanza 4, line 1 - "echo's" should be echoes, I believe. A very strong, bittersweet penning.
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Raw nature, hard hitting and filled with imagery and motion. The images actually tell a story themselves.
Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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a lovely write . . liked "Warm red blood on cold white crystals" and "Your song returns to haunt me" . . well done !!
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Beautiful! I love the imagery in this poem, and it's so vivid and descriptive.
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Thanks. Nobody, including me, picked this up. It is of course disdain.
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A touch of sadness in your words though nicely done. An interesting comparison between the wolves and an unrequited love. A pleasure to read. Happy trails.
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Love and nature - combined they make
extraordinary poetry. When I read your
poetry I feel very close to what I can only
describe as joy. Your words never fail
to move me, Peter. Love, Lane
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First, love the title - drew me in! Good use of internal rhyme (muzzle nuzzle) and overall, quite descriptive producing a fine visual. Good stuff, m'friend!
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