Friends, talking, arm in arm, pacing at the same speed
Mirroring one another subconciously
Always in perfect step with the other
Arguing couple, trying to compromise, failing
She steps left, he is stepping right
Uselessly attempting to match one another
Restless mother, holding her child's hand, pacing
Her small son takes too tiny of steps
Warily trying to slow down for the boy
Unnoticed loner, trudging along, no pattern to fall into
He sees everyone else and feels indifference
No urge at all to change his walk or stance
Excited dancer, breathless, almost bouncing
Mentally going through her upcoming routine
Subtly walking on the tips of her toes
Me, attempting, trying to walk with everyone
Constant struggle to find my own march
Smiling, wishing I had a consistent rythm
Author notes
I find myself always trying to mirror everyone. It is impossible and I do it without realizing it most of the times.
Thanks for reading. So good to write again.
What did you think?
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well done it brought to mind watching an older couple dance as they had danced with the same partner forever anticipating each other moves and those who never take the time to know anything but their own desires at all
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Such good imagery with that! I am glad you could imagine something as you read. Thank you for reading; I hope to read some of your work soon!
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Quitew a charming little write that had a fair bit to say. I could very well agree with you on this. I think most people try to emulate others so they can get some rapport going with them. People do subconsciously mimic others. It is a built in human trait that will never die. You described this very well and used many different forms to show your meaning. I was very impressed with the flow of this and how you managed to keep your reader, me, interested until the very end. A sign of a good writer. Keep up the great work. You will go far.
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Thank you for the support and comment! I completely agree with you: we feel like we can relate to people I think involuntarily and feel comfort even through our steps. I hope to read your published work in the very near future!
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Excited dancer, breathless, almost bouncing
Mentally going through her upcoming routine
Subtly walking on the tips of her toes
I think that I like this part right here the best. Just the thing about dancing...which I am known to do. This is a very beautiful poem though...every single words of it!
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I'm glad you could relate. One of my good friends of mine is a dancer, and I see how she walks on the tips of her toes without realizing it unless I tell her. Thank you for the comment and for reading!
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nice
Constant struggle to find my own march
Smiling, wishing I had a clue to its rhythm
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I feel it is human nature to want to be an individual conformist (oxymoron but some truth to it I believe). I know that one day we will find our own marches. I believe we like to identify ourselves with people subconciously because we want to feel safer and more comfortable. Thanks for reading!
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excellent
Arguing couple, trying to compromise, failing
She steps left, he is stepping right
Uselessly attempting to match one another
Restless mother, holding her child's hand, pacing
Her small son takes too tiny of steps
Warily trying to slow down for the boy
Unnoticed loner, trudging along, no pattern to fall into
He sees everyone else and feels indifference
No urge at all to change his walk or stance
I loved the above features of human siatuations.Well done.Thanks for sharing.Please visit my page and check the poetry colelction published by me. -
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Thank you
I will make sure to read some of your work! I'm glad you enjoyed mine. Hope to talk to you soon~
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good
ironic
i was looking in the mirror tonight
mirror everyone?
i do that, too
when the guy sells sunglasses
i ask to try a pair on
i get the mirror
and
check out people going, people coming
and
then tell the guy
i ain't got the 10 bucks
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That story was interesting because it seemed you were distracted by other people and what they were doing. And it was ironic! Thank you for reading! I hope to read some of your work soon!
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the time you have put in to this is not of one who coppies others but a step into ones own discovery of themselfs .. it is my fondest wish that you do keep trying as you put it mirror everyone.. for what bettter form of flattery is there..
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I didn't think of it like that, the flattery part, but what you say is very true! Thank you for the comment and I hope to talk to you again!
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i agree with you, i think everyone does it on some level. nice job, but the color of the text made it a bit hard for me to read. maybe its just my bad eyes, idk, good job though
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I believe you're right, and I'll change the color so it is easier. Thanks for the comment!
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really enjoyed how u placed many different personalities of types of people in this.well done
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Thanks for reading and liking it lol. Hope to read some of yours soon!
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awwwwwwwwwwwwww
this is so amazing!
its such a clever way of putting this troubling situation.
I love how you acknowledge that mimicing others is a problem!
most wouldn't dard admitt such a thing. i am so glad you did!
this is an amazing piece, thanks so much for sharing,
p.s i truly hope you find out who you truly are.
it is a very liberating feeling once you do. 
your Faerie
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Thanks Faerie! I'm glad you enjoyed it and yes, I am known to be dareful... that doesn't really make sense does it? But thank you regardless, I hope to hear from you soon.
P.S. to you're P.S. I'm pretty sure I know who I am, just not fully yet.. I have a long time to find out completely who that is though.
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Hey Sarah Been a long time since I've read anything of your's..... Glad to see you writing again though! I thought I would just stop by and comment... not much to say that I wouldn't just tell you when we are talking.
Sorry, but its late. Talk to you about it tomorrow
--T.
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Psh, I thought we weren't talking anymore.
Thanks "--T." for reading hehe.
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Naw, I still am babe
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Hm, well then, maybe I won't be talking to you lol jk jk
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I hope you don't mind all the comments
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I don't
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Still featured for another 528 points
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i like it
nice rythym and i appreciate the little subtle meanings that can be inferred from it...
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I am very glad you caught those hehe. Sneaky snake. Thank you for reading!
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wonderful imagery
in a sense, we are all in the same procession. we are all becoming and disengaging to the same dance, the same song and we mirror different aspects of the same tune ... beautiful imagery.
p.s. you are aware that you mirror or you wouldn't have written this.
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You are correct!
I meant to imply that I usually notice myself trying to walk with everyone at their pace, but sometimes I realize I'm staring at their feet and don't realize it until later. If that makes sense.
Thank you for the applause and comment!!
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