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O' Moon

O’ moon you are no friend of mine
You bring me sadness when you shine
Gleaming down on lovers, many
Don’t you know I haven’t any

I am alone and so your glow
Brings to mind what I let go
With your incandescent beam
Shattering my every dream

Lovers wander hand in hand
Beneath the glory of your land
You shine to show the fox it's lair
And other creatures need your glare

There is beauty in your light
But also never ending night
So go away o’ moon, you haunt me
Let me alone; please do not taunt me

J Lloyd






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My screen name is stella187.

My poem is O' Moon.

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  • Beautiful Irony
    May 10

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    Wow. I absolutely love this piece. It reminds me of how I feel. I love the moon, it's beautiful, but it also reminds me of romance - of which I have none. This is a fantastic piece, I love it. Great write!


  • Paloszoo gold member
    March 18

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    Love this! First stanza in particular! Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! I'm honored to have you show your work here!


  • Toxic Stardust
    March 14

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    this is a beautiful poem...but it's not make-me-cry-sad...but it's still good, don't get me wrong...good luck!
    Alicia Lynn


  • Lilian of Tilburg
    March 14

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    Nicely written poem, thank you for entering. I do however not see the "strength in solidtude" back in your write. I felt rather sad when I read this.
    Lilian


  • SunDew
    January 25

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    This reminds me of Romeo & Juliette....

    I really like how you ask the moon not to taunt you with its light shining upon lovers.

    Thanks for entering & good luck!
    ~Bright

  • piccola silver member
    January 19
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    Nice job with the rhyme. I particularly like the first stanza. Thank you for entering


  • Luciferschild
    January 12

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    weird and full of emotions, i liked the premise and the beginning of the poem the most, thank you for entering


  • everyone1 gold member
    December 24, 2008

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    Lovely!



    Well written as it had and air of pure grace within it, and carried me all the way through to the end.

    I admire you that you can write with such scope and depth. Very real and altruistic a fine peace of art ...

    Best blessings to you in the contest!

    ~ James ~


  • reckless abandon
    December 22, 2008

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    This is a beautifully written poem about the moon, I love rhyme and this has great rhyme! Thanks for sharing.


  • aboomer silver member
    December 15, 2008

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    Lovely rhyme and wording in this. I like the depth of emotion - the sadness that the moon reflects.
    Very nicely done! I enjoyed this.
    best wishes in your contest.


  • ChunkyC
    December 15, 2008

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    Now, this one I really like. The rhyming doesn't really take away from this poem. And I can relate so much more to this poem. The moon is my favorite thing in the entire world. It's beautiful.

    *I am alone and so your glow
    Brings to mind what I let go
    With your incandescent beam
    Shattering my every dream*

    This is 100% true for me. I relate so well to this! Amazing. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.

  • stater41
    December 11, 2008
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    Very Good

    Beautiful and melancholy.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    December 11, 2008

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    A Masterpiece!!!

    Beautiful melancholy. Good luck in the contest!!! Peace, Cyn


  • Dragonbabyx3
    December 10, 2008

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    This is stunning and beautiful! The imagery you captured hered here is exquisite! although its a terribly sad tale, I truly enjoyed reading this. Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!

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