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A Vanquished Vortex.

 

Sheets of white cotton clouds in veils of serene sapphire blues.

A cascade of crystals fall, creating music as they hit ocean rocks.

 

The wind whispers wistfully as cobalt candy fluffs are pulled down forcefully.


Gentle pastel hues slowly turn to black.

Submerged into the world,

enveloped in the deepest shades of sombreness.

 

Flickering flames paint lucid dreams of tangerine seduction.

 

Temptation dwells within mountain caves,

waiting to devour its next prey.

 

A world of vast emptiness,

where shadows of deep greys

linger unnoticed in hollow burrows.

 

Stand your ground,

as the world shakes and spins.

Watch as the scorching sun breaks through,

reducing evil shadows to fragments.

 

Glistening dews of silver tints prevail,

elevating into the darkened skies

rejuvenating rainbows of soft tinges,

relinquishing torrents of fear.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

POD Contest

 

Theme: Dreams / Surrealism

Topic: Do not involve yourself in worldly pleasures, or else...

 

20 lines

 

Picture Credit: http://azenor.deviantart.com/art/The-vortex-delights-90808744

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  • StarEyes
    December 27, 2008

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    This is beyond words! I love the images this protrays... what a great feeling in this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    December 22, 2008

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    You are brilliant! There are no words to describe how amazing your poetry is! This was just incredible beyond belief! Congrats on the gold and the HM!

    Take care


  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    December 18, 2008

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    Ok I've either got to stop reading your poems because they make me feel inadequate and in the shadow of an amazingly talented poet or just sit back and admire lol xx No wonder you have a horde of trophies x


  • Kathraina silver member
    December 18, 2008
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    This is an awsome piece. The imagery is fantastic! Bravo!


  • arafura gold member
    December 14, 2008

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    "Temptation dwells within mountain caves,
    waiting to devour its next prey."

    Excellent write. Love the imagery!


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    This is wonderful, you are going to take gold in one of these POD's soon I can feel it. Sensational feeling to this. Congratuls on both shinies


  • maralisa silver member
    December 13, 2008

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    aw wow I loved this poem your imagery is wonderful congratulations on your shiny and honor maralisa


  • Kari gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    Oh wow, this is wonderfully well done. Congrats on your trophy wins!

    I believe that this one of my favorite parts in this poem :
    "Stand your ground,
    as the world shakes and spins.
    Watch as the scorching sun breaks through,
    reducing evil shadows to fragments.

    Love it



  • Nicada silver member
    December 11, 2008

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    You paint some very beautiful and vivid imagery here in this poem. A very impressive write, and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • Alyzeh
    December 11, 2008
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    Oh man.

    Wow.

    Gold. This is Gold.


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 11, 2008

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    This only got a Greeen?
    I just dont believe it,
    He must've been a tough judge
    Very well written dude

    Ken

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    December 11, 2008

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    I like this it is a very nice write indeed IMHO it deserved more then and HM"Scratches Head " lol Things don't always go the way we think they should.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    December 11, 2008

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    My face is like this

    What an amazingly beautiful poem! Your vocabulary just rocks me to the core as I marvel at the beauty shielding the fears expressed

    One of your best hun!

    Congrats on the HM (Should have been gold I reckon)

    Stay safe
    ~Manda


    • chilali
      December 11, 2008
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      Thank you Manda! And no, not gold. Hehe. I did not pay strong attention to the contest requirements and it was my first time entering into a POD contest, so yeah. I'm learning though. Next time, hopefully, I'll do better. But thank you for your kind comment.


      Much love
      Ylova


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 11, 2008

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    i swear i hope this wins this is a great poem one of my favorites from you, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Lonely
    December 11, 2008

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    You sure did create a mood to this poem Ylova, and everytime I read your work, it just keeps getting better and better.. I love the images you draw in this one, a very well written piece of poetry by a very talented poet Best of luck in the contest

    Love,
    Lonely


  • Arkbear gold member
    December 11, 2008

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    Hi there

     

    I have to say, I have seen two of the rettiest writes in this POD Contest.....but as I have just told the last Poet.....you have to keep the balance of *Show & Tell* for me to journey some place ~

     

    You have a magnificant gift of imagery and visuals.....truly sparkling.....but the storyline took me no place.....and I always look for those writes which are going to take me some place.....show me.....talk to me....and then leave me wondering how you did all that in so few lines

     

    You also have a tremendous gift....a natural gift...one which many Poets would kill to have.....but always remember...the journey is what we all seek.....good luck & God bless,

     

    Bear ~


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    i don't know i think we need ourdreams but at thesame time, you can't live in them. Good luck to you in the contest.


  • MD Masroor
    December 10, 2008

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    okay, i'm not going to go in length by what i think i like in this poem, because you should already know by now what your poems do to my imagination. yes, it makes it alive. in other words, you poetry a whole new living organism.. because it is beautiful..


  • Venugopal gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    Stand your ground,

    as the world shakes and spins.

    Watch as the scorching sun breaks through,

    reducing evil shadows to fragments.

    the way you obsorbed thoughts of nature fascinates me beti


  • MysticalRayne
    December 10, 2008

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    This piece is magical - I really enjoyed this and look forward to reading more of your writing - best of luck in the contest Samantha


  • maralisa silver member
    December 10, 2008
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    a wonderful poem your imagry is just stuning good luck inthe contest maralisa


  • thejollytinker
    December 10, 2008
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    Delicious- absolutely no waste product emitted!


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    Absolutely the most colorful dream poem with just the exact amount of surrealism to equal perfection. So much I find a spectrum of emotions. The lines..."

    Temptation dwells within mountain caves,
    waiting to devour its next prey."

    leave me with a complete image within mind.... This piece is most definitely sure to produce a trophy....!

    Great mah Twinny!
    Much Loveto ya Babebraham Lincoln... wooowooo!

    becca


  • moluv10
    December 10, 2008

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    Very nice poem here. I love the imagery. You worded this perfectly. Great take on the theme/topic. A pleasure to read. Best of luck in the contest.


  • ShiningNShadows
    December 10, 2008

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    Wow, this is really impressive. Sorta makes me wonder why I bothered entering the contest. I'm just kidding. But very nice job! I love your style!


  • afroqban
    December 10, 2008

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    like a kaleidoscope of images here! my goodness. you really penned your self an awesome piece. i gotta get my friends to log on and see this. wonderful write!


  • badnovocaine
    December 10, 2008

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    Wow, this really is a vortex
    ----
    Flickering flames paint lucid dreams of tangerine seduction.
    ---
    I liked this, tons of flavor, this a masterpiece of art, towards the end where the flow started getting quicker I really did think the words were going to jump off their pages, the only thing holding them back is the computer

    Good luck in the contest, I am now going re-brush my hair as a whirlwind went through the living room while reading this stunning poem.
    Good take on the prompt also.


  • Rhythm Child
    December 10, 2008

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    I LOVED this, this was really my type of poem, beautifully worded and the imagery was fantastic
    definately one of my faves

  • Sunshine Princess
    December 10, 2008
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    I like your poem ma'am do you know that most active dreams come before you wake up have a nice day.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    Oh my, what masterful metaphor…and exquisite diction, overall an enviable write dear.

    All the best,
    mj.


  • go away.
    December 10, 2008

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    Simply amazing. You evoked a brilliant image! I love your extensive and eloquent use of fantastic vocabulary, and your poem held my attention the whole way through. This is virtually flawless, though I haven't a masters in poetry. Though I have been writing for a year now, so that must count for something! Thank you so much for sharing this with us. xxx

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