Bare knuckled feathers feint the past
where weathered tethers taint their caste.
Author notes
Please interpret the above as you see fit, I'd like to read your thoughts on what this might mean.
A contest entry
- Two lines that rhyme and mean absolutely nothing by Melodies.
650 points, ended December 11, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i saw an indian brave...tired and bloody...swing upon his small appaloosa that had feathers and hand prints painted on him...but that is from reading your poems all day..thanks
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bare knuckle feathers....great wording...
ok i'll take a shot at it.....
a real shot....
not a distraction of one....lol
Bare knuckle feather to me would be...a paper lion....
which makes the noise....the false indication of streathgh.....
so distracting or misleading the past,
which is worn and tattered
and what holds these believes to be true are
tainted in the social or any sort of order of things....
so lies and mistreats distract the truth
these lies that are held to be true...teathered...held as truth
so disturbingly taint the proper order of things......
wow...
this is great....fabulous in fact....
the gift that was given to you is so enjoyed by your loyal readers......
just great....this was outrageous thinking my friend....
i hope i came close to the meaning.
This blew my mind,
these short ones that you come up with are extremely well thought out and i would not doubt these take longer the your more extensive writes....
Amazing!
I love this one!
What would we do without you my friend ,
you move the mind to foreign places.
Liam
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a good piece - a tongue twister that twists the twists of the tongue tightly then twists once more.
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Great imagery. It is a truly short and very descriptive.
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Very nice.
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This brought a picture to my mind, one which might not sit with what you meant, but here it is. I see a man sitting in a chair on the verandah remembering back to the times when he rode across the plains, his faithful horse trotting along, its age now catching up. A sunset in the background and across the back of his chair, a bridle, worn and aged. This is what I see in these words. Thanks for the read.
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Depends on our past, who we are, where we are at the moment we take these thoughts in. And so in that sense, it is my belief that this is very publishable as a sort of where we were at that moment in our lives when we were priviledged to have seen the beauty in this wisdom. Take care always,
Tand.
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Considering the contest rules I think you did a marvelous job. In fact it has more substance and a more pleasing flow than the trophy winners (of which I liked bronze the best.) "Bare knuckled feathers" sounds descriptive of a hawk, eagle or other bird of prey. "feint the past" might imply that the size, power and beauty of those feathers mask the ugliness of countless murdered prairie mice, rodents and birds that made those feathers what they are. "where weathered tethers taint [their] caste." I'd change "its" to "their" because it sounds like we're still talking about the feathers. As for interpretation, the rain attempts to wash the color from the feathers; the sun attempts to fade the colors of not just one birds feathers, but of the entire caste--all birds everywhere.
Birds of prey have a beauty at the expense of so many other creatures, and nature spends all her waking hours trying to leach the beauty from the birds.
OK, I'm ready for my straightjacket!
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I read the contest and your lines seem to fit perfectly with it. If i were to interprate it, I would would looking at an homestead that had outlived its use and had faded with the winds of time, with only memories to keep it company. I could use a couple of interps here, but I think one is enough. Well done on your nothing poem.
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Leave it to Melodies to give a crazy challenge! You met it!! It means nothing but it can be open to interpretation from any reader...that would be an interesting contest...to see what everyone thinks of this! Ha! ~Tia
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Judging by the contest title this isn't supposed to mean anything really BUT... what I get from this is an old person who has been hardened by life on the outside yet somehow softened and touched inside.
Sitting here I kinda picture an old man, alone and afraid inside yet holds a tightly clinched jaw as he sits on his porch looking down the road... hoping for a visit from someone that cares...
I dunno... weird.
Excellent job on this Rory! I gotta give you 3 clappies for coming up with something so short that actually causes us to stop and think about what is written!
~Melissa
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Uncovered and aggressive fists think they understand the cause they fight for. A cause supported and upheld by elders and others who knew how different things could be because they had lived the difference.
The skeptic is the elder - Skeptical of the young fighter's reasoning. Does he truly understand the cause?
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My attempt at interpreting this quote. Interesting word choices. ~Pamela
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my brain is floating in egg nog...i cannot for the life of me figure out a meaning, however, when you write gibberish it's damn good gibberish
Love, Lane
(Merry Christmas!)
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hmmmnnnn...bare knuckled brings to mind a fight of some sort, but uneffective if you're only equipped with feathers to defend your place in society. Those weathered tethers, however invisible, keep holding people in their place. Yes, this makes perfect sense to me. or it could mean...
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OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHhh!!! WOOOOOOOOOW! This poem is telling about how the first birds were dinosaur birds. DUH! OF COURSE! It is very scientific.
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You pulled this off magically. I don't know if I could play? However some of the most popular 'money making' songs of all time have lines just like this. Good work my friend. RC
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I am not sure what this may mean, but when I read it I see a majestic old bald eagle looking at his own shadow.. I am sure that many other people will see something entirely different but it was fun figuring out what I saw!
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