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rush of sorrows

somehow my mind wanted to smile
no emotions became gleefully apparent

sudden changes compete with physical signs
tears held back may soon effortlessly slip

I can't control the rush of sudden sorrows

my mouth was in the future
my mind was in the past

"a smile within a frown" disappears

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prompt:
"A smile within a frown"

50 words

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  • Ken-Maverick
    December 13, 2008

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    JUDGED!

    Yes, well worded indeed
    Much enjoyed the read

    All the best to you in the contest and thanks for entering

    Ken


  • Alyzeh
    December 11, 2008

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    Wow. This was extremely well worded and written. Brilliant imagery. This contest is going to be tough to judge for Ken. Wonderful entries. All the very best to you

    Love
    Alyzeh


  • Hikari Lady
    December 10, 2008

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    Wow!! Now I feel so small with my entery. This one blew me away with it's simple imagery and uncomplicated expressing. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.

    ~Noor