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Suffering





A depression
no more smiles
desire to die
suffering in bonus.

Silence complaining
moaning pierced by a spear.

An appearance
forges a tiny space
to hide frowning
forced smiles.

Laughs,
beauty,
eyes, look, see,
sniff,
spring smells tone distresses.

Bursting speeches
facing problems
return pallid life
plead you to come back.










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Prompt: "A smile within a frown"
50 words more or less

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  • Ken-Maverick
    December 13, 2008

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    JUDGED!!

    Wonderfull write,
    "Bursting speeches
    facing problems
    return pallid life
    plead you to come back."
    I can relate to this very much
    Well Done

    All the best to you in the contest

    Ken


  • Alyzeh
    December 11, 2008

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    Great work! Very well written. Everyone in the contest has done so well seriously. This ones going to be a tough one to judge. I'm scared.

    All the very best to you. Good luck
    Love
    Alyzeh


  • chilali
    December 10, 2008

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    A great take on the prompt! I loved this Well done. Good luck to you in Ken's contest I've entered this contest as well. Well, I still have to write for it, but I wish I hadn't because I know I will not be able to beat this! Haha.

    Much love
    Ylova