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Reprisal

 

 

A painted curve on plum lips

 to camouflage a burning frown.

 Inside,
a summer storm,
   rumbles...

Silent screams
longing to be
unleashed.

Elements of anger trapped
within a fake smile.

Broken vows and vicious lies
cause blazing flames

   to contour her aggression...

Smile; she will,
with pretense and disgust
until...
  Sweet revenge becomes hers.

 

 

Author notes

Prompt - "A smile within a frown"
50 words more or less

54 words.

Picture Credit: http://fc15.deviantart.com/fs36/f/2008/264/3/a/She_Wants_Revenge_by_darkixi.jpg

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  • xDemonicxAngelx
    December 22, 2008

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    Woah, I love poems like this. Fantastic take on the prompt! This was just... Wow! Congrats on the HM.

    Take care


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 13, 2008

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    this is just wow, you have so many sides to you writing and it is amazing, keep it flowing and congrads on the hm


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 13, 2008

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    JUDGED!!

    I know this feeling all to well,
    and you penned down these emotions with fluid ease it seems,
    Very nice indeed

    All the best to you in the contest

    Ken


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    This is fabulous, such a twist at the end, jealousy and revenge can be such killer feelings. Best to you in the contest

  • Kari gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    Ah yes that sweet revenge can be such kick ass karma sometimes. I agree with what thejollythinker said. Make sure I'm away when she comes out


  • Alyzeh
    December 11, 2008

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    This was brilliant! Once again, you managed to capture the right emotions for this prompt! Great lines and strong imagination! All the very best to you in the contest
    Love
    Alyzeh


  • maralisa silver member
    December 10, 2008

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    wow this is a amazing take on the image so deep and powerful good luck in the contestmaralisa


  • thejollytinker
    December 10, 2008
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    Wouldn't want to be around when she unleashes...


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    its awesome.... i can see where our writes are becoming increasingly alike in nature.! I invision every syllable spoken. I applaud you !!!!!

    Love ,
    becca rose....
    (dont laugh, its fer real....)


  • Puppydog gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!!

    Oh my how I have felt and done this, held in every feeling, every angry and sad emotion until it was just the right time to let it all out.'s


  • Rhythm Child
    December 10, 2008

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    your new writes are really something special, i loved this poem, it had such a dark feel to it and the picture was brilliant


  • Scyphon
    December 10, 2008

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    Well done. I love it. Such a great tale and the ending really was awesome. Best of luck to you, keep it up

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