What has shown power like the sunlight that o'er the horizon flows?
But you are stronger than any light this world has ever known.
What could give life like a tree once it has fully grown?
But you are more precious than any life this world has ever known.
What marvel is there like the rain that falls upon seeds once sown?
But you are more stunning than any element this world has ever known.
Waves have crashed upon the ground and birds above have flown,
But you are simply more than anything this world has ever known.
Author notes
It may have been a little too girly for a poem about a guy, but I like it, so nyeeeeh.
There's something flat about it, isn't there?
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excellent
I enjoyed the way you compare his qualities to the different things that exist in our world.
Not too girly at all.
Jeannette
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Thank you. I found myself trying to compare him, and found him incomparable. So, ta-daa!
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Thank you. I found myself trying to compare him, and found him incomparable. So, ta-daa!
I didn't think so.
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Amen. I really like this one.
Good work!
Blessings,
C
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Wow, what a critique. *sarcasm*
Thanks, Demington. Your applause says it all.
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I am a marvel, like the rain that falls upon seeds once sown,
But you are more stunning than any element this world has ever known.
I love this part of your poem, kepe it flowing
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Thank you.
It's funny; I'm going to edit the mess out of this poem, so by the time others comment on it, they'll probably be wondering what you're talking about ^-^
Thanks for commenting; I can always rely on you.
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