Such a short time we knew each other
and yet it felt so right,
proposal and a marriage
the future we'd ignite.
Change the tides and paint the stars
nothing we couldn't do,
yet soon our bed of roses
went suddenly askew.
What went wrong it's hard to say
there's always two sides to tell,
yet alcohol had an evil way
of taking us to hell.
Drunken and demanding
when things were never right,
into my shell I began to crawl
at all costs avoid a fight.
Our daughter still remembers
so many years ago,
the shouting from her bed she'd hear
as profanity did flow.
How does a love so promising
just end up in the trash
and dried up dinner when you were late
end in the sink with such a crash.
So many years ago it was
but memories linger on,
a time when love just ruled my world
had ended up so wrong.
Author notes
2) Love- Write about a love that didnt go as well as planned.. my boyfriend split up recently after dating for 3 years so i would love to read about that... Sad poems are my favorite!!!
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- *~!~*LOTS OF OPTIONS!!! Love-Sad-Happy- Rhyme COME SEE*~!~* by Shannon62875.
500 points, ended December 29, 2008, 9 entries
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All the what if's and why's that keep us up at night
Wondering what we could have done to keep our love
from crumbling under addictions might.
I relate to this poem so closely and understand the hurt and frustration that you felt/feel.
This brought tears to my eyes, you penned a moving and beautifully written piece.
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This sounds too personal not to be true, if so then I am so sorry. Alcohol has a lot to answer for I think as do those who allow themselves to be consumed by it's trance. Well written hun. Best to you in the contest
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Aaaaaaaaaw~
Oh My this tugs at the Heartstrings~
Powerful emotions also You presented images I imagine many could relate too~
Bravo!!
Alcohol can be a killer when given the right environment
and I don't know too many people who wish for the right environment~
a very sad situation~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Excellent
Wow, what a powerful creation. So sad, but so well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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many a love ends in the bin,,sadly our bed of roses .doent endure,great poem good luck dear friend
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hey this is brilliant, i just love the story that it tells xxx
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AMAZING!
I can really relate to this write..WOW! This write was amazing... its like you said exactly how i was feeling.. I couldnt even write a poem like this... its amazing.. i love it! My parents fought all the time and we could hear them from in our bedrooms so...
Our daughter still remembers
so many years ago,
the shouting from her bed she'd hear
as profanity did flow.
That stanza explained it all.. It hurts really bad.. I hate divorces... But i learned that my mom was happier without him and found someone new and now i have my best friend as my sister haha... its pretty cool....
EVerything gets better... it just takes awhile.. keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!
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That's very sad, but unfortunately an oft quoted tale. Not easy to put poetically.
3 clappies and a sigh.
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I can only wish this isnt true, my friend
Alcohol never goes well when its mixed with love,
i've seen it happen to so many of my friends *sighs*
Its one of the reasons i dont drink much,
I too tend to get aggressive when tipsy,
but i just avoid it altogether nowadays,
except for the occasional celebration drink of course. LOL, listen to me rant, I'll shut up now
Once again, nicely penned
All the best to you in the contest
Ken
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I like this. . .it tells people to use logic when it comes to love. This is well penned.
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