Parked up in a thoughts’ queue;
He digs the colors on his fingertips.
Seeing images of multiple shapes
Like a circus on display.
Lopsided lips with gritted teeth.
Downcast smiles shimmering in the rain.
He loses his thoughts…
As he groans in pleasurable pain.
A decorating vase in life’s illusions.
Author notes
Prompt - "A smile within a frown" 50 words more or less.
Note:"As he groans in pleasurable pain." was used just to show the confusion of happiness and sadness, nothing adult-related.
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A contest entry
- Swiftness by Ken-Maverick.
700 points, ended December 13, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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JUDGED!!!
This is a Great take on the prompt,
the first two lines just grabs the reader and pulls them in all through to the end.
So well done
All the best to you in the contest
Ken
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I agree with the peculiarity of the life and its incidents as well..you made it very clear here in the words of your great work..well done...
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Oh wow. This is brilliant Noor! Strong thoughts you have penned Noor. Very interesting.
All the best in the contest.
Love
Alyzeh
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alot of dept
emotions, thoughts entwined
beautifully creative
God bless you my friend...
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very creative, you have a wonderfull way with words,, very deep and complete,,,good luck in the contest
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this is very creative... you did marvelous job on this piece!
becca
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What a great take on the prompt love. I loved this. Good luck in Ken's contest
Much love
Ylova
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