That winter's night, in silence, I lay..
Wondering beneath the moonlit skies,
Were they true? Santa.. those tales and all they say..
His whiskers, white; wrinkles and kind, old eyes..
Wondering beneath the moonlit skies
When I saw a sleigh, as if dipped in gold
His whiskers, white; wrinkles and kind, old eyes..
Santa was just the same, as the tales all told..
When I saw a sleigh, as if dipped in gold,
They all seemed real, they all seemed true..
Santa was just the same, as the tales all told..
They rode past me, whisking my skirts in blue..
They all seemed real, they all seemed true..
The angels, the trumpets and all at sight,
They rode past me, whisking my skirts in blue..
I recalled.., as I rose with the sun's first light..
The angels, the trumpets and all at sight,
I thought it was a dream, but I did see them,
I recalled.., as I rose with the sun's first light..
My new blue skirt was sure, torn near the hem..
I thought it was a dream, but I did see them,
Something nice.. something beyond savvy..
My new blue skirt was sure, torn near the hem..
I knew.. my doubts all flew; my mind, carefree..
Something nice.. something beyond savvy..
Yes, Its true! Santa.. those tales and all they say..
I knew.. my doubts all flew; my mind, carefree..
That winter's dawn, in silence, I lay..
Author notes
Option 3.
Form: Pantoum
http://thepoetsgarret.com/2008Challenge/ten.html#mar
A contest entry
- Allpoetry 2008 Christmas Bash - Form Version (win a silver membership by Little Eagle.
6500 points, ended January 17, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for your entry. A lovely poem. Sorry I could not comment fully. -
Woww! I love the imagery amd vocabulary in this. I actually imagined a sleigh dripping with gold liquid! I didn't quite get the theme of this, but it is very original, and I admire you for that. Well, I sorta. Very Christmasy xxx Thanks for sharing this awesome amazing poem with us!!! xx
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awww this is so cute
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What a nice write
This certainly depicts a child's sweet and innocent perception of Santa, in a way that is heart-warming and truly golden. Well done on a great write! -
Excellent
A rather nice write, Imagery; rhythm and rhyme ar just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done. -
Very Well Penned
I like this style and what you have done with this piece. It peeked my interest from the first word to the last..Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest........LC
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I admire your work in this style of poetry. I enjoyed this poem. Nice. Shancy.
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I love the verses that say "old eyes". Its a great take on the tradition and belief that has been around for so long. Defiantly a great write. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest!
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Rasberry
I think that poem is beautiful... It made me smile... Thanx for sharing something so awesome!!!
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How Perfect
This was amazingingly awesome, something unlike I ever read before. i love how the lines shift up with each stanza ending the poem answering your inital question. this is a great holiday poem and gets me all warm and fuzzy inside I usually hate poems that do that LOL. But there is no denying that this poem deserves gold in this contest!!!! Good Luck
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