He haunts her, hunts her;
Ghosting across mountain ranges and
Moral indignation.
At the approach of her pursuer
She snarls,
Swollen lips over glistening white teeth.
She stalks him in the candle light,
Her hunter; her downfall.
Shoulder blades rolling rhythmically
As she prowls across the bed
With sinful grace;
Ferocity lending fire to her skin,
Her spirit blazing with a curiosity
That overwhelms instinct .
His dark eyes flash in warning just before he acts,
But his twilight words and midnight cool breath
Already glide, insubstantial as smoke,
Across her heightened awareness,
Tantalizing, maddening,
She cannot break free.
He gently restrains her wild mouth with his own,
And smothers her defenses with skilled advances.
Her passion rising with his weapon,
The ensuing trials of predator and prey
Can lead only to blood,
But Thai tiger moons demand sacrifice
And surrender has never felt so much
Like a kill.
Author notes
Hmmmm....
Option 4
It was between this one, and another of mine! If you don't like this one, I would love to enter a different piece! This is a new style for me, and I want to know what people think!
Always,
V
A contest entry
- Erotic/Sensual Poem/Background! Take a LOOK!!! by Zenda-Lokki.
550 points, ended December 11, 2008, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Very sensual and beastly. You tell a vivid ode with rich imagry. It left me wanting more. You have a real flare. Well done!
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I loved it. The imagery and sensual words are near perfect. It's hott, but not porn or over the top. It's neat how you turned this into a predator/prey analogy.
"Across her heightened awareness"
This part really turned me on
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i really liked it. congrats on the trophy!
its a smart write
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Amazing!!
OMG!! This poem blew me away. I can't even begin to tell you how much I enjoyed reading it. I never wanted to come to the end.
My favourite part:
"Shoulder blades rolling rhythmically
As she prowls across the bed
With sinful grace;
Ferocity lending fire to her skin,
Her spirit blazing with a curiosity
That overwhelms instinct."
Just fantastic, thank you so much for sharing it with me xx -
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I'm so glad you liked it! This subject matter is new for me, but I've had alot of fun with it so far.
Also, your favorite part is actually what inspired the rest of the piece,which makes it my favorite part too.
Thanks for the chance darling!
Always,
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I'm not surprised those lines inspired the poem, I'm sure they'll inspire a little something something out of me too xx Thanks hun xx
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This is very very good lass...really....
i would leave this.....
very sensual.....
I also had visions of a big male cat...biting the back of the neck of the female....
musk in the air....
then turning human....
a metamorphoses of sorts....
a transition of animals hunting then morphing into humans..
that may be a strange thought ....
but it was my first mental visual.......
so you did paint a picture......
im sure for others that read it may see it different....
I did lots of LSD in the sixties so my mind works pretty strange....lol
Very steamy but done with great sophistication.
I insist ....dont change anything...
You have great talent lass...i enjoy your work.
Lowell Poe.
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Pretty nice. It has a very smooth and shadowy feel to it. This is just my opinion, but I feel you have an overreliance on adjectives and adverbs, especially towards the end of the poem, but overall it painted a very nice image.
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I really liked this. Its amazing and passionate and. . . beautiful. I don't really know what else to say. Great job!
♥ Lillie ♥
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