Sucked into the ecstasy of the sea,
feeling its mouth probe and tease,
deciding if this is a tasty morsel,
or a morass of woes at midnight.
Grateful to lose that bitch who
calls her the sun, the golden orb.
She who burns and highlights
every moment of life for all to see.
Salty tongues lick my breast, teasing
nipples into coral shells that shudder.
Let me lie beneath the depths forever,
breathing in air that isn't there.
Author notes
Sea's Trap
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700 points, ended December 30, 2008, 12 entries
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Comments
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This is quite a good poem. I think the last lines stand out the most. The most interesting part was the mention of not being able to breath air since it's under water. Well done!
Thanks for entering my contest!
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This is quite a write; I found myself reading this a couple of times due to the strong sense of imagery - I needed to grasp it completely
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Stay safe
~Manda
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Vivid imagery allied to powerful language makes this a treat to read--excellent!
Bill
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