Christmas is a time of believing
Hearts brim with joy
Every split second is treasured
Ribbons bind the presents beneath the Christmas tree
Icicles crack and the night is awaken
Stars glitter fiercely to guide your way
Home is anywhere you discover love
Togetherness with traditions
Holiday enchantment mounts the dreams, on Christmas eve
Ending the anticipated night for children
Mistletoe permits the teenage girls, to sneak in a kiss
Only long enough before daddy can see
Momentarily all is hushed and peaceful
Each soul is composed and worriless
New year, new struggles, new phase of life
Though at the time no one can glimpse beyond the present
Standing together, hand in hand, the family savors every moment
Author notes
This is all new to me and I dont really know what i'm doing. My cousin has an allpoetry account, and I used her email to start my own account. Im not sure if im doin this right or anything so i'd appreciate if you would be as critical as possibly. Thankyou!
I believe I do this: acroustic.
Words used in wordbank: Christmas, Ribbons, presents, Christmas tree, icicles, stars, togetherness, tradition, holiday, Mistletoe, New year
A contest entry
- Allpoetry Kids Christmas Bash 2008 (win a gold membership) by Little Eagle.
4200 points, ended January 11, 24 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think about my poem?
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I like the background, but it makes it very hard to read the text on the page - I think that maybe a plain background and then the one you have now in the side columns would be better. The poem itself is lovely
I like the way you have used the acrostic form and the message in your words is beautiful
Merry Christmas!
Polly
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Thankyou all!
Matske, I fixed it to where it wasn't center. You're right it is a LOT easier to make out and Acrostic. I'll remember next time -
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Very good!
Do you know that this poem is in this contest twice?
Have a look: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4851169
You'll better delete that one.
Anna.
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This is a beautiful ACROSTIC... I also love the title of this poem: "Cherish the Moments". Very cleverly done. It would LOOK even better though when you had not centered the poem. Then the title in the first letters could be read much easier. The contents of the poem is great though.
My compliments.
Anna.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
You have done this very well; I didn't realise at first that this was an acrostic but then I saw it and smiled
You have written a lovely poem filled with Christmas cheer and care
Gorgeous background too
Best of Luck in the Contest
♥
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Stay safe
~Manda
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very nice
We need to cherish our Christmas memories...you're right.
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