I try my best to make you proud.
You laugh out loud.
I get great grades and never stay out late.
You point and say it's because i can't get a date.
I do what you say and never talk back.
You slap me across the face and stab a knife through my back.
I never doubt you.
You doubt everything I do.
But it's I who was always there for YOU.
So don't YOU ever laugh at me, point your finger at me, hurt me or doubt me.
And don't you ever fucking tell me what i can do, because it's everything you can't.
What did you think?
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Well, you seem like a good person. And I can totally relate to this... Don't take that shit from anyone.
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I can also relate to this (I won't rant in detail lol). Strong stuff, keep writing it out. . . oh yeah, welcome to AP.
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Welcome to Allpoetry
Hi, suicide
Pretty good for a rant, I daresay, and I can completely relate to how you must be feeling. When I was your age (I'm 21 now... soooo long ago, huh
), my dad and stepmother used to enjoy calling my sister and I nasty names; they made me feel inadequate, worthless, and lazy, and I eventually began to believe them, since I'd put up with their abuse since I was a little kid. It's quite easy to not feel good enough when the people who are supposed to be your biggest fans treat you like a failure... Not a pleasant spot to be in 
Whoever this person is isn't worth your time or energy.
Aside from the first two lines, your rhythm was consistent, and I thoroughly enjoyed the read. Just make sure to always capitalize "I"
Well done, and please let me know if you have any questions 
Write on!
Laura
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such anger and pain. Amazing. This is how I felt with my sister. I always was better but only bc I tried to do my best. When some puts u down and tells you you can't the nest thing u can do is show them you can
Myles -
sad!
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