Lying there
Your breath on my hand
Your tears on my cheek
Your lips on mine
My heart rate goes low
They think i'm going to go
They take you away
But you wont let go
tears streaming down your face
you run over to me
Kiss my lips and turn away
I force myself and finally i found
the words
"iloveyou"
A contest entry
- ,words disappear .words once so clear by Kirs.
725 points, ended December 25, 2008, 21 entries
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Superbe
Your words are really beautiful and every contour of this poem is quite touching. Although I do see a certain lineal innocence in your work, it is uplifting to see such purity. Writing fine poetry is quite an ordeal that no one can accomplish without extensive labour, and when good work is improved upon and polished it can become something refined and great.
You seem fond of writing, and I am glad you've entered =]
♥.
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aww - so heartfelt and touching. You've painted a tender image.
best wishes in the contest
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Awee thankss =)<3
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