i suppopse it because i have never
actually belonged in anywhere or
maybe its because the only way
anyone ever understood me was
through my poetry, but even then
i still wasn't heard.
when i was 5, i dreamt of having some-
one dependable, but they always slipped
through my fingers like putty, and i was
always left alone in a room filled with open
arms and welcoming hearts.
i used to believe in love but as i grew older
the idea of someone falling for me never seemed
to fit with my program of being happy and independent.
but even the independent want to feel special.
as a 16 year old girl with her head in the clouds
who breathes in beautiful arsenic, i've never
felt the need to die just to be remembered
so much in my life.
Author notes
Hi, i'm Dani, or dani-elle[my AP name]
twin or AP sister. 
i;m 16..and lately in a great mood.
i'm actually a great listener and all that lovely stuff...i guess i'm dependable..lol
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dani-elle
This is a remarkably apt piece! This is a lot like I felt in high school.
Thanks for sharing & good luck!
~Bright
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I can't help but notice that bitter twinge of cynicysm that should never be there. In someone so full of life....All I can do is hope, that a sister's touch, a kind and honest word when it's needed, will take away that cruel edge that fate left in your hands. Welcome to the family!
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First things first: I feel you need to go through an edit a bit. Punctuation/grammatics/and the actual words -- in the first line, it appears as if it should be 'i suppose it's because' and it certainly doesn't.
However, aside from that issue, I find this a stunning piece. It seems lonely, but it's honest, and the bitter emotion that seems to underly the piece is definitely there.
A nice write though, and very good for a read.
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Beautiful melancholy...
It is lonely, being all alone in life... Wishing you all the best!! 
Peace, xx Cyn 
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Yup, so Just throwing this out there... Im pretty sure that the word suppose has an extra p in it in the beginning. the last section was beautifully written. and because my dinner is done i bid you adue
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i love this part.
"as a 16 year old girl with her head in the clouds / who breathes in beautiful arsenic, i've never / felt the need to die just to be remembered / so much in my life."
this write is amazing.
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I think you mean 'putty,' not 'puddy.'
I really love the way you describe yourself. I don't know that I would be able to use imagery this brilliant when describing myself. 'as a 16 year old girl with her head in the coulds / who breathes in beautiful arsenic, i've never / felt the need to die just to be remembered / so much in my life.'
That's amazing, genius. I love it. Amazing piece and best of luck in the contest!
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aww thanks so much, i appreciate ur comment
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