Immeasurable distance
Of petal’s laid miles.
Sequential steps taken on ebony roads.
Honey painted trees on the side
& colorful flowers’ smell floating
On the shimmering air around.
Candy stairs between us.
Two hearts reaching in the darkness
Touching in the light.
Though immeasurable distance
Of petal’s laid miles are
Standing between our longing bosoms.
We’ve touched in the dreams
With cotton mattresses &
Silver sun rays through windows
Of a sacred bedroom in our
Longing minds.
Thoughts of stolen yesterdays.
Moments of gold floating
On the surface of our everyday life.
Remembering you has become
My first task in the morning
& my last at night.
Waiting to sleep again to be there
In that sacred bedroom where
In dreams you’re waiting for me.
Author notes
Contest prompt:
Option 2 -
Heart to Heart though Far Apart
For the published in the next Allpoetry Book!: Not sure this fits the contest, but I tried. 
Thanks for reading!
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A contest entry
- Quickie Contest By Reptile Lady by Reptile Lady.
825 points, ended December 10, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romantic Pre-Writes by poets whisper.
700 points, ended December 13, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Connect the Dots!!! by yourbentangel.
875 points, ended December 24, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Your imagery is good, but the flow could use a little work. Also, look at the bigger picture; though pretty words are wonderful, make sure you're presenting a strong message.
Thanks for your entry!
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This was absolutely amazing, the flow was perfect and the imagry impeccable. Thank you so much for entering and good luck in the contest!
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ahhh dreams. Sweet. Thank you for entering
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Humm..just a touching and imaginative task of the heart you sketched with so much poetic impression..a great write you brought..love it..well done...
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You end so very strongly ...
.... weaving magic of love you wish.
'My first task in the morning
& my last at night.
Waiting to sleep again to be there
In that sacred bedroom where
In dreams you’re waiting for me.'
Coming out from the incoherent state of mind to say your hearts desire busting out in emotions.
Congrats for breaking into the world of love poems specially as this is your first attempt.
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wow
I have to say your words pulled me in.
very elegant and amazing imagery
outstanding
Candy stairs between us
Two hearts reaching in the darkness
Touching in the light
FANTASTIC VISUAL
so well done my friend
God bless you...
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I am in awe with this beautiful love poem
I am so pleased this prompt inspired you to write for me and Jonathan.
The feelings of longing are felt, and the softness of dreams laid upon the mattress where she lays waiting
Best wishes to you
Julie
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And best wishes to the two of you. I'm glad you liked this write.
~Noor
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Noor! This was amazing. I love this. The imagery was amazing. This will definitely win you a trophy! I know Julie and she knows what's good when she sees it. I was going to enter this contest. I am scared to now *bites nails* hehehe. Well done love.
Much love
Ylova
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Oh boy. This was sizzling. A very passionate and heartfelt write Noor. I'm glad I was of help, because this is a stunner. I was thinking of entering the contest, but you just changed my mind.
Thanks.. Hahah. Kidding.
Beautiful write, with brilliant imagery. All the very best in the contest! I think this should pick up a shiny easily.
Love
Alyzeh
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Haha!! Thank you, ms. Inspiration. If you enter this contest then message me the link to your poem, would love to read it.
Best of luck, hon!
~Noor
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This flows very well and has beautiful imagery. I love that last stanza as well, a wonderful ending to an amazing piece. Good luck in the contest.
Well penned,
~lost
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Very sweet and cohesive flowing set of words. I am impressed.
michael
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SWEET AND PASSIONATE!!!!
And such sweet and wonderful dreams these are sis!'s
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heart felt
Thoughts of stolen yesterdays.
Moments of gold floating
On the surface of our everyday life.
Remembering you has become
My first task in the morning
& my last at night.
perfect
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awwwwwww
this is so beautiful!
"Thoughts of stolen yesterdays.
Moments of gold floating
On the surface of our everday life.
Remembering you has become
My first task in the morning
& my last at night.
Waiting again to sleep there
In that sacred bedroom
Where in dreams you're waiting for me"
these words stopped me in my tracks, sucked the air out of me. they are perfect!
thanks so much for sharing
your Faerie
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