1 TEAR 2 TEARS 3 TEARS AND MORE
DRIPPING FROM MY FACE AND HITTING THE FLOOR
THERES SO MUCH, SAY A LITRE OR TWO
UNLOVED! UNWANTED! UNAPPRECIATED TOO
ALL THIS IS A RESULT OF LOVING YOU
1 DRIP 2 DROPS 3DROPS AND SO
ALL THIS IS LIQUID, ALL OF IT FLOWS
THERES SO MUCH, A FEW BOTTLES FULL
I BELIEVED YOU WHEN YOU SAID I WAS BEAUTIFUL
BUT YOU WAS UNKIND AND YOU WASN'T GREATFUL
I DID NOTHING BUT SHOW AFFECTION
BUT YOU NEVER CARED
{{YOU'RE THE REASON I SANG!}}
SO GO ON LIVIN YOUR LIFE
AS IF I NEVER APPEARED
{{I'LL EXIT WITH A BANG!}}
A contest entry
- Why by charmander13.
700 points, ended December 24, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - obituary by adsaige.
2000 points, ended January 5, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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the contest 'obituary' requires a 20 line minimum, left alignment, and a monotone background ... none of which your poem has and the subject matter is not relevant to obituaries, inmy opinion, but the main problem here is the line requirement, alignment requirement and background requirements are not met
thank you for your entry in the contest -
This is so cute!
I love you sass and presentation... Keep your spirits up, dear..
Thank you so much for your entry and all the best to you!
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