wide eyed and wet
i watch
your fingertips
pulled skin
like you are just trying to get out
whats in
spun up in wordful thread
bound by fantasies
that will inevitably
not be found
chordless and lock-jawed
waiting for the next
turn of time
and the damn ticking of the clock
drives me mad
still
i do not move
or turn on the light
or speak
any unnecessary
information
this is dire circumstances
when our world
is at war
Author notes
wordful - chordless : is used by poetic license ...
A contest entry
- ,words disappear .words once so clear by Kirs.
725 points, ended December 25, 2008, 21 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Love the wording, images and depth in this. It would be hard to pick a favorite line/phrase as this all goes so well together.
I especially like your last three lines,
'this is dire circumstances
when our world
is at war'
best wishes in the contest
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Wow,
--I just sat here trying to think of something to write, my fingers didn't want to work, and that feeling just lingered--
It's not enough though, I'm constantly having to undecide what to say next, it's wonderful. Bar set.
Best of luck,
♥.
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holy shit.
this is fucking,
ouch,
fucking goddamn perfect!
you're driving me crazy with this one,
utterly perfect babe.
this one stings
and twists my skin off.
and who the fuck is that george the 23rd bastard? that's all he can say? what a douche bag. (sorry if you're mates.)
but uh,
you're awesome?
yes.
yes you are.
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you are the mofo bomb! and yes, george the 23rd and i are mates, though he is so NOT a bastard ... and i think you two would actually like each others work ... check him out... in the meantime i am glad to see you on here ... after your rants you have been scarce ... MWAH* AiM
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I love this Amy! There's tons of different ways of looking at this!!!! Love it!
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Wars can be easily ended...
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