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- The Heart Attack that Waved Goodbye Before It Slapped Me in the Face -

 

 

 

 

 

 

Oh I remember it like yesterday, you slapped
the crap out of my self-esteem
but not before side swiping beads of sweat.

Know I owe you a debt of gratitude
after asking- 'How's your day?" then doing
a retarded Matrix duck backwards.

The best minute of my Life-

How dare I express emotions, show care
when dominoes fell down the crotch
of your tightened pants, nicknamed Firestarter.

Fist clenched chest chartered to Neverland
with your pre-paid ticket I took
as 'good luck' and 'by the way
watch your step, invisible ones a doozy'
.

Memorable moments even Kodak
wouldn't touch-

'Fight Club' fueled your passion to penetrate
lack of common sense into our conversations
we never had lasting more than a minute.
[that is two so far- we are doing great]

Jabs right and left missed, footwork lost
in la la land, orbs glossed, tainted over
one too many times for me to stomach
but apparently my contract stipulated-

Till death do us part...

and part you played was the extra on scene
in the middle of a western set staring at me
fist punching palm, hand then motioning
throat slit gesture [just a game you insisted]

while riverdancing over my tombstone taken
outside for the ink to dry.
[you sure learned how to entertain fallacies]

Oh also you listed cause of death
as heart failure for not following the rules
you set before crying game got under way.
One I forgot to read, I was so blinded
by your Light-

turned off when you crawled out backwards
through
the rubber flapped- doggie door.









Author notes

Title Prompt:
The Heart Attack that Waved Goodbye Before It
Slapped Me in the Face...

From Hostess:

Well hello again. Didn't expect to see me for a while did you?
Well, I'm going home again this weekend and want some entries
to mull over, as well as the ones already have. So...
What I want you to do is look at my poems and pick a title and
write a poem with the same title as mine.
It doesn't have to be the same topic at all, but it can be.
No PW at this stage sorry. The last 24 hours will allow them,
however.

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 17, 2008

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    Wonderful! So true, but yet so funny. Has the mixture of sadness, humour and utter WTFness. I like it. It's different and well yes, it makes me think and my head spin. Thank you very much.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    You make the crap in life funny
    I so like how you deal with the bad things that might happen to us. You instead of making a drama of dramas, you turn them into something amusing (or at least you use amusing images to talk about)
    Your poem reminds me personal issues of my past, but I still had to laugh while reading this...does it mean I'm complete healed?
    Thanks for the morning laughter beautiful Desire


  • HaleyMary
    December 9, 2008

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    Powerful write and wonderful take on the prompt.
    I liked the part of heart failure and not following the rules. It seemed metaphorical, like life not going a certain way and people feeling heart broken because of it. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • maralisa silver member
    December 9, 2008

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    aw hun a brilliant poem your emotions touch the readers heart from stanza one through to the last you have resinated the title so wonderfully my friend good luck in the contest my friend maralisa


  • StarEyes
    December 9, 2008

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    Holy Smokes! What a read this one is! I wonder how many besides myself will be able to relate to one part or another of this? This is truly beyond words, and the emotions that drip from this one, just rip out the heart!

    Great take on the title!

    Best of luck in this contest Beautiful!

    and love

    Nettie

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