Sorry eyes,i have the power within i just don't show it.But when you test me then you'll know it.Sorry eyes i can't tell you how hard it is to cry.But to me its just lookin at the sky,.Sorry eyes is like my amagination but in my heart i show know affection.stirving 4 a heart that is so kind i just wounder why i couldnt make it mine.Sorry eyes so lonly and tyring eyes have not forsackin you.but it just me that don't want you. im so sick of being lonly im so sick of feeling tyred i just want somone to be botherd with me and sit down and drink a cup of tea.so i say to you sorry eyes good bye 4 ever and ever and now i can tell you i will never c u agin for i have been seeing somone new and somone brave i see in this heart that know one konws. but now it's like i have to go so again i say good bye good bye for ever to you.now i feel as if i never knew you.
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This was really good, sounds to me that someting tramtic has happened. You did very well showing your emotions.
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different
This was a different view on a set of eyes... my question is are these eyes yours or someone else's ?
Yvonne
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You're style is so unique! I'm getting used to it now. Very good!
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Very weird. Some errors.. But i understand.. i think. Um, did this happen.. or? And.. you seem to preassure in ryhming. Remember, poems don't have to rhyme... And if they do, make it flow. Okay? Is was good, but kind of hard to understand.
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loved it well writen
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