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Work in Progress

He ran into a wall.
That’s the first memory I have of him;
just ran flat into a wall
and crumpled to the ground.
I’m not even sure why.
He wasn’t stupid.
Maybe it was to make me laugh
because I was sitting off to the side,
away from the others,
the party that was being thrown for me.

He was my best friend’s cousin.
It was a big deal because
he didn’t come to town very often,
but she still threw my party.
Funny how she didn’t notice
that I wasn’t part of the crowd.
Then he ran into the wall.

He lay there, looking up at me
as I stared perplexed back at him.
Hi was all he said
before bursting into giggles.
And like it was a plague,
I soon was trapped in his laughter.

Who are you?
I asked when I could breathe again.
Me?
He paused a moment before answering,
I’m a work in progress.

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  • Demon Eye
    December 9, 2008
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    Oh my god! This is great, can I keep it? The only part that I would suggest (in order to make this perfect mind) is to work a little more on the second stanza so that it reads with the flow of the rest of the poem, otherwise this is great, and great snag by the way, those first two lines are what convinced me to read this wonderful fic... (steals it and gets it framed)