You promised you wouldn’t hurt me
You swore you would always be true
And now I look around
And I can’t seem to find you
You promised you wouldn’t hurt me
You said you would always care
Yet I turned to see if I was wrong at first
And you still aren’t there
You promised you wouldn’t hurt me
You swore that I’d always be your girl
Never leaving me alone in this dark
Heartless sometimes cruel world
You promised you wouldn’t hurt me
You said you would always be true
So tell me why I sit here crying
Acid tear drops over someone like you
By: SLD August 12, 2003
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Oldie
Written August 12th, 2003
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very good write girl...nothing hurts more than when a loved one does it and says they would never hurt you..
love amy -
Ouch, that was harsh but very good! Awesome work. P.S. my fiance says good work on that one too.
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why?
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this is very very good...i would rate this prolly at a 9.5 it had good expression, and thank you for commenting on my poems
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excellent poem
A very nice poem, nice flow and a good story line. You have a wonderful talent and it shows in your writings. -
Love it
Wow!!! This is a great poem!!!! I totally love it, & can't wait to read more by you! Nice rythem (<sp?) & flow...I like it so much, I think you deserve applause.
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*scrolls forever* finally
well this is definatly another great poem by you!!! Awesome job!
Much Love
~Laura
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Damn!! Nice poem. I love your wording. You rhyming theme and meter is smooth. Thanks for sharing.
TD -
promises, promises, promises. oft' the ones that say that they willna hurt ye are the ones that hurt ye the wost... mayhap 'tis because we let our gaurd down, and put our faith in them...i dinna know what is exactly, but that let down is hazourdous for ones health.
arden -
Very Very Very Very Good.
Mind if I add you to my favorites? and Author Page.
(Thanks for commenting on my work)
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great write
It always seems to hurt so bad when the person who says they will never hurt you turns around and hurts you worse then anyone before because you trusted them.... beautiful write.... the words flowed together in harmony as the story unfolded in your mind
great write!
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I understand SO much the feeling that eminates from those words. Your a very talented poet. I never have gotten deep into the rythmic form of verse. I'm more of a ... beat or slam poet. But your expression touchs me, thank you for sharing your wonderful poems.
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This is so sad.... (jenny offers a Hug)
I'm a mommy now..lol, well in a way so let me know if you need help with anything at all
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ah your oldies are great, as ar all your other ones for that matter . sad and touching, its hard when someone you think you can count on and will always be there lets you down 
, beautifully written was a lovely write
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Oldie or not, this was a great poem! So much hurt and painful emotions, honestly it made me relate to it and picture me this summer. I loved this girl! Keep it up!
With Love, ~*JLB
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Awww...this is so so sad..and wow can I relate to this. one of my first exes told me that, and he hurt me more than any other person I cared about like that. I guess the first heartbreak always seems like the worst..
you did an awesome job on this one sonya, i think its painfully beautiful.
~*~blessings~*~
~rora -
oh my goodness....this poem is so good! wow, i am just sitting here in awe. i can definitely understand how you feel in this one....like you've been abandoned and left alone by someone you cared about. gah it's a bitch ain't it?
You promised you wouldn’t hurt me
You said you would always be true
So tell me why I sit here crying
Acid tear drops over someone like you
that's my favorite part of the poem. prolly because i can relate to it so well. you don't want to like give that person the satisfaction of you crying over them...but you can't help it and your tears just keep coming....grrr! lol....great write tho! it's like you read my mind and wrote my thoughts down. thank you so much for sharing!
-brae -
Very Nice.
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