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A Painted Inferno

 

 

 

Under a searing orange-flamed heaven,

machined figurines roam.

 

Plastic sunflowers grow next to stagnant cool blue streams.

Fire paints its flames and purifies empty hearts and souls.

 

Sun-drops buried in raindrops

Purple soils mirror self-obsession and pride

 

Empty faces look into ethereal skies as

aerial music sounds.

 

Fireworks exploding,

unleashing chimeras of the intoxicated minds.

 

Colors meld to form a cluttered dream-scape

Loosened plate tectonics

yet vast trenches.

 

...Protecting machined hearts.

 

This is the kaleidoscope within fire-dreams of the illusive.

 

'Colors swiftly form to act as a device

against their godless souls with meandering paths.'

 

Author notes

Painting is by Wassily Kandinsky.

20 lines or less.

This was a tough one to write for. Like I said, all your contests require great talent Mama Jin, one that I do not yet have. But I tried. I looked deep within the painting and let me tell you, I love Kandinsky's work but to write on it. Whoa. I did my level best here and I really hope you do like it. An abstract poem as well. Let's see how many people can read and understand what I was trying to say. I really had fun writing for this contest. A great challenge indeed.

Much love,
Ylova


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  • Merry Christmas
    January 14

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    A beautiful beautiful poem. I can how it managed to win those two shiny golds. I love the imagery and the description.

    Thanks for entering.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    January 1

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    Beautifully written as is all of your work my dear friend. This was an enjoyable read and I am glad that I got the chance to read it tonight. Thanks a lot for sharing it and good luck to you in this contest. Happy New Year and all the best to you in your days ahead. Take care!




    Jeremy0826


  • Walk-Free
    December 31, 2008

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    "Plastic sunflowers grow next to stagnant cool blue streams.
    Fire paints its flames and purifies empty hearts and souls."

    wow. you left me speechless


  • silverscent gold member
    December 29, 2008

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    I really enjoyed where you took the poem from the prompt, the imagery and descriptions are so vivid. Thanks for entering.


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    December 22, 2008

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    This was brilliant! I adored that title. The imagery was fantastic. You did a great job with this one! Keep it up. Congrats on the gold trophies!

    Take care


  • Harlequin Dance
    December 20, 2008

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    Very nice. I love your use of imagery and the descriptions you wrote in. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.


  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    December 18, 2008

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    It may have been a tough one to write but what an end product!! Well deserving of both the gold trophies and could be in line for the hat-trick lol xx Great write hun x Good luck in the contest.


  • Venugopal gold member
    December 14, 2008
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    wonderful insights


  • TwilightDazzles
    December 13, 2008

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    This is a wonderfully abstract write that fits beautifully with the painting. This is full of imagery that definitely creates beautiful images in my mind. This kind of reminds of me of those afraid to fall in love "Loosened plate tectonics
    yet vast trenches.
    ...Protecting machined hearts."

    I don't know...probably has nothing to do with what you meant for this to mean. But that is what abstract poetry does. It makes everyone think of something different. Thanks for sharing this with me and I wish you the best of luck in the contest you have entered this in.


  • JinSays gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    Honey.
    This poem is pure magic.
    I am beyond words, as the images flash before my eyes. Kandinsky was so brilliant, and there are so many layers to his work. You mastered this contest prompt sweetheart. You make me proud, your talent is so powerful, and you dont see it.
    I understand that probably better than anyone here.
    I love you dearly, and I am humbled by your compliment that you wouldn't have the talent to match anyone's here.
    You've far exceeded it.
    Kandinsky would be very proud, as I am.
    Love,
    Mama Jin


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    Beautifully Intoxicating!!!

    I see I have some stiff competition in this contest!!! Wishing you all the best, and take care!!
    & ,
    xx Cyn xx


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    This is wonderful hun, you did this picture great justice. Wonderful images painted her in these lines. Best to you in the contests


  • Kari gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    Hehe my old name on here use to be kaleidoscope so that makes me like this poem even more!
    Best of luck in the contest. You deserve gold!


  • styrofoam
    December 12, 2008

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    this has so many interesting images...

    "plastic sunflowers grow next to stagnant cool blue streams"

    is my favorite line here

    i have a feeling you are talking about some kind of war ...

    it's an intriguing write, beautiful like the painting that inspired it.


  • Hikari Lady
    December 10, 2008

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    I considered entering this contest but the prompt was so hard yet you did a great job with it, you indeed looked beyond the colors and canvas. Wonderful imagery. Best of luck in the other contest.

    Much love
    ~Noor


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 10, 2008

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    This was a tough one to write for. Like I said, all your contests require great talent Mama Jin, one that I do not yet have.


    on what you posted in you author notes i say BS, you have talent and you are a very gifted poet, this poem is proof of that, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • written-in-ink
    December 9, 2008
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    very nicely written
    love the pictures that you created with this piece
    =]]


  • Puppydog gold member
    December 9, 2008

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    WONDERFUL!!!!!

    I am one who never was an abstract kind of person, when in elementary school I was the one who fingerpainted scenery while others did this kind of work I do not have much of an imagination when it comes to this but here goes! In this I see someone who does not care and just goes about the world around them seeing only what they want to see and not what is really there. I am way off of the meaning ain't I ?

  • loafy
    December 9, 2008

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    well well well. I certainly was fond of this poem! it reminded me of my childhood, playing gameboy advance games like "Yoshi's Island" or "Mario Adventure 2"...it was a splendid reminder! I also like your mix between fantasy and reality. Awesome!


  • Joseph Hollis
    December 9, 2008

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    Yesssss, Wassilly Kandinsky...One of the painters that we have a common appreciation for. I think you would have made him proud with this write. I love the attention you placed on colours. The imagery is also very vivid! You've painted a picture of your own with these words.


  • myrataal silver member
    December 9, 2008

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    Your poem is textured ...

    and intriguingly well done! I think you have an immense splendor to share with your readers.

    Good luck in this contest, you immobile one! Referring to your mood

    Love
    Myra


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    December 9, 2008

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    Wow hun
    Amazing poem
    Love the imagery your poem etched here
    Best wishes in my sisters contest
    Love Julie x


  • Rhythm Child
    December 9, 2008

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    Plastic sunflowers grow next to stagnant cool blue streams.

    Fire paints its flames and purifies empty hearts and souls

    i LOVED the kinda juxtaposition of these lines, the contrast that you created was brilliant
    a really interesting and original poem

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