Through needles flow a deadly gun
The pimps and hos are on the run
Uneasy rest in Satan’s hold
There was a time we weren’t so cold
Smoke and ashes in our eyes
Through stinging tears we realize…
The gun is pointed at our heads
One more hit and we’ll be dead
So stay by me,
to feel alive.
“Don’t give in!”
the angels cry.
My strength is in
your loving eyes.
Hold each other,
to stay alive.
Our time is running out to fly
One last chance to live or die
We find dark corners in the night
Feed our toxic appetites
Let go, the needles in our hands
Our veins dry up like desert sand
Keep hold, the faith to stand the fight
Keep hold of love to ease the night
So stay by me,
to feel alive.
“Don’t give in!”
the angels cry.
My strength is in
your loving eyes.
Hold each other,
to stay alive.
Author notes
option three
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Comments
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Thanks for the entry, Good Luck!
~Carlie -
there is great strength in this. there are no pauses for it sails along so nicely. the meter is great. i liked the change up of rhyme patterns. thanks for entering this lovely piece.
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good story. dont like the rhyme or linebreaks. jsut personal preference.
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Wow.. I love it... goodluck poet
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This is very powerful. I like it a lot
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wow I really like this flow is pretty good. I digg the message.
la-dee-da!
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outstanding poem that you've written, it flows nicely and I can't even begin to say how it makes me feel.
rendering me speechless is not an easy thing to do, not by any means.. you succeeded in doing that
good luck
kat
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wow i love this poem alot i dont know what to say but to clap my hands and pray that you are alright and the clapping hands mean that i have so much to say you made me want to comment and that was the idea thanks for sharing good luck in the other contest god bless you and just know if you ever need someone to talk to i am here for you
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great poem... awesome flow!!!
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This poem was more familiar to me than many would understand...excellent work you have done here dear poet. ~Sang~
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Rolling and tummbling, "rose of battle"!
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"So stay by me,
to feel alive.
“Don’t give in!”
the angels cry.
My strength is in
your loving eyes.
Hold each other,
to stay alive."
that is my fav. part! i think this just an awsome write it flows with such ease and its just great
~*Princess Cuddle Bug*~ -
I thought this was well done, great rhyme and meter, well done and good luck in the contest,
Floorboards.
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