Standing at the edge of nothing
I feel my fears begin to fly
Lifted from my body
My soul is floating high
Silent good-byes I speak
Yet they remain unheard
Everyone always found me
Weak and strongly absurd
Like a leaf falling
From upon the highest tree
It fell forgotten to the earth
I’m just one of many
No one cares about you
No one wants you to spread your wings and fly
They want you trapped in this world
So ugly tears you shall cry
Well now they’ve got their wish
I’m one of the countless number too
No one cares
And they don’t try to help even if they do
By: SLD August 22, 2003
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Written August 22nd, 2003
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The second-to-last stanza is flawless, and touched me. To feel stifled from everyone around you is so frustrating, and could be spirit-breaking for some. This is an amazing poem, you did a great job. Thank you so much for sharing it.
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I loved the 3rd stanza - beautifully said.
Awesome poem...truly amazing. You are a wonderful poet. Keep the imagination running wild! -
Beautiful poem!! I like it a lot...its an awesome write..everything just flows perfectly together into one piece..and thats what we try to achieve when writing a poem
Great job hun! Keep it up!
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Amazing Sonya...truly amazing. You did an incredible job
write Very well penned. Love the flow...God Bless you!
~sweetgurl -
great job
great write.... it is well penned with a good flow and a well matched rhyme scheme.... and its on an emotion that many will recongnize in their own lives... great job...
take care and god bless
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Thats about the most applaud claps ive ever seen, but i can see why. this is one of my favorite writes by you. It's just flat out amazing, it expresses alot of emotion and hurt... Amazing job!!
Much Love
~Laura
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wow fantastic, your emotions are spewing out of this poem, i also love the background you choose for this. serious it was very ver well written. cant really say much about it cuz i liked it so much, theres is nothing i would change. very very well done. cant wait to read more of you stuff cuz im sure its as great as this piece. you have a real talent sweetie. keep on writing!
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... I can so totally relate.
Such a wonderful written poem, such emotion, I can
dig and feel this, very awesome...
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Very nice write. I like the ideas you've put forth here and the way you've described them. Good job...
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Very Good..been there along time ago..but it doesnt have to be that way...how we live our lives is always a choice...never worry about the opinions or lack of from others you are the one who knows who you are..and those whom judge,treat unfairly, or think they are better... usually arent. If someone ever makes you feel unworthy in any way...look at their issues and see whats really in their closets hehe..what a mess thats never been cleaned up
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fab!!
absolutley brilliant write..enjoyed it thouroughly..the flow is just excellent and rhyming is perfect..loved it..very well done!!..
best wishes
katt -
Wow, I absolutely love this, it has such a detached, dreamy kind of flow to it, I just sort of felt my way through it, drifting along the words and phrases. I really enjoyed this one, such talent!
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This is an amzing write. It is exactly how I feel at the moment! Good write! The flow and wording were awesome. The simplicity was beautiful as well. Good job and keep up the good work! God Bless
PhotoPoet -
Hmmmm...seems like I commented on this one before. But since I like it so much, if I already did comment, I will again.
Great write, I love it. The flow is awesome, and the words, just the whole piece is really great!
Freaky -
This is amazing...and how so much my heart seems to relate to this at the moment...I've been fighting so long to not become one of those 'numbers'...to not give up this fight and let them (society) win...just that one line..."standing at the edge of nothing"...that just really grabbed me...for it describes how I feel so much...so simple yet it is so much...beautiful write And thanx for your comments as well!
Take Care!
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Sonya
Very powerful write
Intense emotions and sadness pouring from your heart
We all have these moments, I do hope yours are better now
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Karen
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excellent
this is a very emotinal piece, very dark in places, but nonetheless this is a special piece,we all cry tears, but to cry ugly tears there has to be something really wrong, I applaud you for this........Great write -
This was a fantastic poem, I loved that a lot of people would be able to relate to it. Great expression of feelings!
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Brilliant. Like DutchtyGurl my favourite part was also 'No one cares about you
No one wants you to spread your wings and fly
They want you trapped in this world
So ugly tears you shall cry'
Good poem, I am sending you my applause and I smile...
Bec
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Ok...You wrote a comment that was so bloody nice about my poetry when you write like this!!...this is so elegant, without patronising rhyming, it just flows beautifully and judging by all these comments everyone else thinks it too! Your an exceptional poet,!
"So ugly tears you shall cry" ...what a dark but emotional line...you can really feel your pain in this poem...I must say, I relly like this, and I'm glad when I get to applaude a poem...becauase it means I truely love it!
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Very poetic. I LOVED it. I too feel the pain of the great void that envelopes so many of us, choking out our soul. I'm going to go read some more of your beautious flows.
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Such a competitive world that we live in, when people cannot take the time to help someone else for fear that they'll be helping give that person an advantage over themselves. All I can say is try not to be that person, because you have seen the other side. Also, don't take revenge, just take control of your own life, and put these uncaring people in there place by doing just that. You can do it, all you need is to accept that.
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aww for me!
august 22 2003? how is it possible that i haven't read this one before? . omg! this was so sad, brilliantly done though (mind you most of yours are). i couldnt tell whether it was about someone who had died, and was looking down on people who were starting to forget them, or someone who didnt die, but was upset and never helped by anyone? i shall have to find out next time your on? well was beautifully done, great write hunni
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Awesome writing, beautifully put together!
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Wow, this is great. I understand where you're coming from, and the comparisons (leaf from a tree) really help the reader get a visual edge of the poem. The emotions is very well done, and you've capured perfectly what many people feel all the time...wonderful write.
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Wow, this was great girl! I hope this was just one of your ramblings and you didn't tell me something. I hope everything is fine....It put so many pictures in my head, but I loved it...great work!
Love Always, ~*JLB
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Wow, that third stanzas, that was so creative, the way you described the feeling like that..wow. That totally blew me away with all of that imagery and relating emotions to that. Great work..this was a really nice flowing poem.
~*~blessings~*~
~rora -
Beautiful
i really liked this poem... i'm feeling so much like that right now... i really relate to this part;
No one cares about you
No one wants you to spread your wings and fly
They want you trapped in this world
So ugly tears you shall cry
so so true for me lolz great write... thanks so much for sharing... i really liked it!
hugz.bugz.and.butterfly.kisses
~av~ -
i really liked reading this it was great...it expresses how i feel some times...ill enjoy reading more from you...
mcl
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wonderful
I really enjoyed this poem. I think so many of us feel this way. I know I do. Very good work. I will enjoy reading more of your poetry. -
This was good but a little confusing. What is "It"? Is it your fears or your soul? Or is it your body? You seem to have lost the flow a little bit.
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Tight work
Nice piece, I enjoy your words and are very fluent with them. Keep up the good work and I hope to read more poetry by you.
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This is a wonderful poem, with a great title. The only thing I think that could be done to improve it, in my opinion, is to take the "well" out of the last stanza, I don't think it works very well.
Overall, this poem is virtually grammatically perfect, and it's really well-written. I love the falling leaf analogy, and the creative wording.
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You are a very talented poet. You did a very good job on this poem. I look forward to reading more of your work. ~JD
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