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to feel a long sigh-----------

Why it happened?
almost three decades  back
we were with one breath
and living together with
Hopes of communion.

But fate ruled otherwise
Though our desires and aspirations
are unique and never played differently
our expectations untimely rose high
and made us to feel a long sigh
Why it happened?
your heart and mine are well versed

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  • charmander13
    December 9, 2008

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    I can understand your perplexed feelings well... hmm, but perhaps you could work on the grammer and spelling ("hart"-heart) some?

    Thank you for your entry and all the best to you!