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Blue Vision

  

Morning found her

looking in the mirror

at her own reflection -

it was all she owned

as she grew older;

she saw suffering,

sacrifice, and yes,

pride, slowly aging

into wrinkles upon

her face, and fearing

only that men would

not love her - yet

she is reminded

that it was the men

who did not stand by

her in her youth, thus

forcing her to become

a martyr - raising her

four children alone;

she looked to the sky

and saw dark clouds

staring back at her,

speaking the sad truth -

that her final days

would now end alone,

just as they had begun.

 

 

 

 

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  • pain in colorado
    December 14, 2008
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    Wow

    A beautiful poem for the time.
    This is the kind of poem that is timeless.
    My favorite part are the lines:

    saw dark clouds
    staring back at her,
    speaking the sad truth -
    that her final days
    would now end alone,
    just as they had begun.

    Thank you.

  • SoulWhispher
    December 11, 2008

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    This is a most moving poem and has such emotion, it really moves the heart, the truth is often sad, yet we are never truly alone, blessings with peace and love John, I really loved this poem


  • chilali
    December 11, 2008

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    Wow. What a poem! I loved the imagery and the strong emotions in this piece. Another great write by you. One of my favorites!

    Much love
    Ylova


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 10, 2008

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    What can i say...
    guys can be pricks sometimes
    especially in their younger years.
    This is sad Cyn and an eye opener aswell

    All the best to you

    Ken


  • arafura gold member
    December 9, 2008
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    Great work. A strong poem full of wistful emotion and sadness. Wonderful!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 9, 2008

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    this was wisdom, that is all i can think to say about it, it was wisdom, i know i enjoyed reading it, keep it flowing


  • Quiet places
    December 9, 2008
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    Excellent

    Such strong emotion. A sad story to read knowing that it is true for many. Great job. Don


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      December 9, 2008

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      Thank you for your thoughtful comments, Don...

      Glad you were able to stop in to read my work tonight!! Peace, Cyn P.S. Thanks for the kudos!!

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