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bliss' love

having your name on my lips
puts a song in my heart
your smile makes my skin
blissfully burn
and for you to go
tears me apart
your touch is what i
yearn
sweet caress from you makes
my heart thirst for more
its my heaven my hell and
my earth
in the sky my love
soar
her love is my death
and rebirth
love with you is
like no other
and can not
be done
with another
MINES i
AREam
YOUyours

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  • isabellacohen
    December 25, 2008

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    lots of feelings

    there is a lot of feeling in your poem and lots of feelings,
    I got a sense of your yearning and of the all-ecompassing.
    I did'nt undertstand the last three lines but would like to,
    best wishes,
    Isabella