Does it give you pleasure,
to cause me so much pain?
Twist the knife in my heart just a little,
over and over again…
You dangle hope before my eyes,
Why? What is your intention?
Cause you take it away, just as I reach,
and I crumble but you pay no attention.
I hate that I feel this way;
I hate that you’re on my mind.
I hate thinking I mean so little to you;
How can you walk away, leave me behind?
Could you, would you, just tell me how,
(after all that we've been through)
to sort among these feelings,
so I can be just like you...
Not have a care, not be bothered at all.
How hard could it really be?
Except one major difference between us,
you don't seem to care about me.
I’m left to wonder how and why,
for as much as I care and as hard as I’ve tried,
you’re so indifferent when you make me cry.
I just wait for this love in my heart to subside
No one needs to tell me,
I know that I’m a fool.
But there's something strong within me
that holds on to believing in you.
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Terrific - Don't think you want to be like them
Enjoyed reading this. Expressed very well (clearly) in great rhyming poetry.
The 6th, next-to-last, verse is my favorite.
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Geez!! You sure know how to rhyme well,
Impressive to say the least,
A strong beginning with an even more powerful ending. Great work
Ken
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I liked it...
This was a VERY sad write... But I enjoyed it... Don't we always just want to believe... *sigh*
Keep that pen flowing with ink that never fade...
illusion
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been there... so painful and frustrating...
My favorite lines
"No one needs to tell me,
I know that I'm a fool."
It's far better for one to know they are foolish
than to be completly unaware.
In the end hope may fade, yet even foolish hope never dies.
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What a bumhole-face this character who makes you feel like such. Although, this is an awesome expressive poem you got out of it. I like how you could just take this poem and mail it to him, and him understand what you were saying, it is kind of like...writing a letter in poem form. Thats what makes it so personal and special. People don't ever get to the point these days, and you do, i think thats preeettty rad if you ask me. I really like how you ended it too, kind of like admitting your vunerable even though you still want to pull away. Beeeauuttful work, as it always is.
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