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only in dreams

Something about the way that first, hesitant tear clung to your eyelashes,
crystalizing the light as it tickled the green in your eyes,

something about the way that miniscule hand reached,
and the way your sob echoed with something more than joy,
as you lowered your face

and met all five fingers,
grasping with wide-mouthed wonder,
at the shimmering droplet suspended in the corner of your eye.

The universe ground to a halt and I was re-born
a thousand times in that moment
when it first sank in:

"this is my son."

Author notes

"Luke's so cute"

Heyy so just in case you weren't sure I wrote this from the father's eyes.

I wish you the best and brightest of days with Luke and hope that this little poem can do him justice (although I'm sure no words truly will).

cheers.

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  • Beverlynohime
    December 13, 2008

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    This is so beautiful! Everything about it...just stunning and amazing. Kids are amazing. Your poem captures only a parent's joy and I really love your take on it.


  • Mrs D
    December 10, 2008

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    reallly good.....it sure takes a special moment when you first reaalize this is "MY OWN LITTLE PERSON".... you portrayed that very well .......absolutely love the last paragraph ....."The universe ground to a halt and I was re-born
    a thousand times in that moment
    when it first sank in:

    "this is my son." "

    really touching good luck !!


  • acoustical
    December 9, 2008
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    this is incredibly sweet.

    wow.

  • ElectricBloom
    December 9, 2008

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    Oh my gosh!
    this is so lovely, it's put a huge smile on my face and made me so happy ^.^ i can't even explain it.

    you have captured the first father son moment perfectly, truly this is a beautiful poem.

    i especially love the first two lines, gorgeous imagery.

    best of luck in the contest you have entered!!

    ElectricBloom


  • Between My Ears
    December 9, 2008
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    I love the way you lead into the ending, also, I have a nephew named Luke, he's two, and adorable.


  • Ja Vorbesc
    December 9, 2008
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    Cheers. Good poem. Seems accurate too, to the best of my knowledge!


  • chills gold member
    December 9, 2008

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    OH DAN

    This is so lovely - can't pick out a favourite part - it's all just small and perfectly wonderful. Just like a baby. What a heart you have. x

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