universe painted haphazard
albeit a plan or purpose in mind.
found its equilibrium
in one great shot;
the beginning of big bang.
all spots floated,
without sinking.
moving away in time,
balancing on it's own.
first stroke was brilliant
spontaneously unplanned.
there is no rhyme,
no symphony,
yet deliciously melodious.
perhaps God uses different tones
in orchestrating universe.
symmetry irregular in small scale.
in infinite space and time
there is immaculate order,
your mind alone conceives.
Author notes
painting credited to
Painting is by Wassily Kandinksy.
A contest entry for:
Improvisation of the Abstract. . .
A contest entry
- Improvisation of the Abstract. . . by JinSays.
735 points, ended December 16, 2008, 12 entries
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Add an S (or a can or will?) to the end of the word Conceive. (?)
This poem is just fascination captured and poured out on to blank canvas. I think you've done Mr. Kandinsky's work proud.
Thank you, this poem is just wonderful.
Love always,
Jin
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added 's'hank you for your comment
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This is AMAZING!
A brilliant piece of poetry, the sort that one would want to frame and put it up in their houses! Stunning!! Good luck in the contest. I loved this!
All the very best to you, always.
Alyzeh
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Wonderful piece of poetry
Love your use of metric words
Best wishes and good luck to you
Julie
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a fantastic take onthe image good luck in the contest dad
maralisa
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Brilliant!!!
Good luck in the contest!!! Peace always, Cyn 
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