Made to obey.
Don’t shed a tear.
Kept my mouth shut.
Trembled with fear.
Learned more than once.
Mus'nt resist.
Never accustomed
to the blow of the fist.
Why did Mommy marry
such a horrible man?
Robbing innocence from children,
I’ll never understand.
Memories still linger,
pain still survives.
Many will deal with it
for the rest of their lives.
Mom may not see,
but I look right through.
I can only hope you get
what’s coming to you.
Author notes
Background on the poem... I wrote this not only for myself, but for all children that go through any kind of abuse, whether it is: physical, sexual, or verbal abuse. I know that words can't express the feelings of having to deal with it, but that's all I've got. I choose to speak for those who don't know how.
Simone Brooklyn.
A contest entry
- come on i want to feel the passion by ruthie fallen angel.
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Comments
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This is so beautiful. It sends a true and simple but powerful message. I't just...amazing. I love it. It really made me feel since i can relate. Honestly it just left me silent after...Thank you so ych for entering.
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i can relate to this really well....
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Short and too the point.
I'm glad there is someone else in life speaking out against abuse.
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Short, sweet, and amazing, I liked it although sad, great write, good luck.
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Thank you for following my simple contest rules.
This is a painful write about brutal reality for a heinous number of children. Thank you for giving them a voice.
Thanks for your entry & good luck in the contest -
Karma I believe is real, though I hate to say it but those that have hurt me haven't exactly got what they deserve yet. But, because I know I would give up without believing in it, I believe that what goes around, comes around and they will suffer for making me suffer. Good riddance too, unless they are reformed and properly so. If they are reformed, they will realise they deserve their punishment.
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good job and good luck
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Im sure I commented on this entry, and yet I dont see it here.
I dont know what must have happened.
Anyway, what I said before was I love this.
I love the feelings you pured out, and I think you have done a great interpretation of my prompt.
Thank you for entering,
Love,
jin
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great write, wheather its true or not, still full of angry feelings and tonnnnes of emotion.
well done and best of luck in..well...all those contests
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Pock Marks and Chicken Scratch.
[my offering of - admittedly abstract - title]
Otherwise...beautifully done. The format is powerful in context.
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well written
It hurts...
It hurts even more when it is someone you loved that hurts you.
i couldn't think of a very good title, perhaps its good as it is, but if i have to say, it will be "Supposed to love".
But again your perspective will be the best one.
For you have felt it, and i have only tried to imagine. At that too, I have succeeded or not, who knows...
-Aj
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WOW WOW WOW!!!
Don't you dare change a thing! I know it hurts And you put it out there for all to see. Simone this is so good that it's great. The short burst of verse are like hitting something, that so adds to the feel of the poem. In this terrible moment...you penned brilliance. Brovo.
Please find a contest to put this in so people can read it!
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This is pretty deep and sad!
Sometimes it's hard to understand why our
parents pick the ones that they love. You
really have to take a step back and see things
from their perspective in order to really understand
what they are feeling deep inside. When we fall in love it can be a very beautiful thing and also, a very hard lesson to learn in the end. I hope that it all works out for you and your family! Take care and good luck to you!
Jeremy0826
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