The bright sun is shining in the sky
And the luminescent yellow leaves are falling
But it was a beautiful day long before this moment
When I saw your sparkling eyes
Strolling down the sidewalk today
I don't care if you're upset
I want to hold you close to my heart
And to see you smile again
Ayeka please tell me why
Why were you away for such a long time?
Was it because I did something wrong?
Seeing you in the distance among the freshly blooming flowers
I do not know if you know who I am
But maybe I will gaze into your eyes one day
And even hold your hand
Ayeka I want to know you well
Maybe I just don't know what to do
All I want to say to you
I just care for who you are
Ayeka please tell me what
Has darkened your blue eyes
I'd like to see them bright again
Somehow I know this is incomplete
But I cant stop feeling the way I do
So now I'll talk to you when corduality permits
Enjoying every moment beside you
Author notes
From the Tenchi series. Character: Princess Ayeka of Jarai. "Raggle Fraggle"
A contest entry
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this was not only a good right but it also touched my heart! I loved this and i think that you should think about this as a writing career because of how much people can relate to this! I know that you are goingt to do very well in my contest!
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love it!
I love tenchi muyo and you did a great job of capturing the personality's of the characters in the poem...
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Nice job on it! It was written beutifully!
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Hello again, I'd thought I'd let you know that if no other entries have been added to my contest by Feb. 4th, I will be closing my contest. If you are still the only entry at that time, I will give you a small portion of points (if that is okay :]) for entering. I hope that is okay with you.
Thanks again for entering!
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I always wanted to share that poem with an anime fan anyway. That was something on meh bucket list. Thanks for reading!
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Aww such a cute write, despite the sad tone. Ayeka is one of my favs from the Tenchi series, so brownie points there ^^ Thanks for entering, and good luck!
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A nice poem.The sidewalks of life, the awkward anticipation of seeing them and wanting to say something
an intesting one
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Lovely words of love for someone you are concerned about. Fresh and simply written, like a feather floating in the air..thanks for sharing
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Ayeka please tell me what
Has darkened your blue eyes
I'd like to see them bright again
drop dead beautiful words.
are these lyrics? they very well could be. they flow so gently, so beautifully.
you have something great here -keep at it!
-wesley.
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Hey nice write here. You sort of captured my whole last year at college. The sidewalks, the cute crush girl, the awkward anticipation of seeing them and wanting to say something...
That's an interesting name though. Did you choose it for the poem or is that the guy or girl's name in real life? Either way it was very nice read.
Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest!
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The name and story is actually a derivative from an anime series. Search up anything related to "tenchi" and you'll find this girl's name and image.
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