Nightlife spilled out
into darkened streets,
throaty windscapes
swirled in remnants
of the bar scene,
as we trekked off -
two surrogate lovers
seeking a blue moon
and faux romance
until dawn’s sunrise -
when wild animals
return to their cages.
Author notes
Contest criteria: "Different" "No love poems please" "20 lines or less" (This is NOT a love poem). Contest prompt: Improvisation of the abstract image, "Improvisation No. 19" by Wassily Kandinksy.
A contest entry
- Improvisation of the Abstract. . . by JinSays.
735 points, ended December 16, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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You blew me away with this.
I didnt know this was No 19, or I would have labeled it as such.
This poem is by far the most meaningful I've come across so far.
Yeah, exactly.
Wonderful entry, my sister.
love always,
Jin
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Wow
You always manage to improvise so well, this is a great poem, it so well written, blessings with peace and love John
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I entered this contest as well. I wish I hadn't after reading this! Hehe. This was a stunning right for sure. I have no idea how Mama Jin is going to judge this. She is going to have such a hard time doing that. Hahaha. Well done and good luck in the contest. Keep it flowing
Much love
Ylova
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Very nice take on the prompt, the last six lines are very unique and wonderful.
two surrogate lovers
seeking a blue moon
and faux romance
until dawn’s sunrise -
when wild animals
return to their cages.
Best wishes in the contest
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Great take on the prompt. I love it!
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Beautiful imagery and a stunning take on the prompt. I loved this. I've read your work on nature, it's absolutely brilliant. A great read. This contest is going to be so very tough to judge. All the very best.
Love
Alyzeh
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wow, you got all that from that picture, amazing, this is truly abstract, but i know i enjoyed it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Amazing love the thoughts that match this wonderful poem
Caged animals... oh so sensual
Best wishes and good luck
Julie
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments, Julie!!!
I appreciate your stopping on to read my poem!!! I know the contest calls for "No love poems" but this isn't really a love poem - I don't think. 
It may be DQd... Anyway, thanks for the kudos!!! Peace always, Cyn 
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Wow, This is amazing! Oh wow. I cant get over it! Wonderful take on the prompt sis! I thought about joining this contest, but surly this is the Gold! Beautiful! Good Luck!
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Thank you, Chrissy!!!
This was kind of weird, not really knowing if I had the right vocabulary down - it's been awhile since I was young and wild - a loooong while(!!) Thanks for the kudos, and I think you should enter the contest, too!! Take care & keep smiling... Loves ya, xx Cyn xx
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