As I feel your warm breath, upon my neck,
I don't really know, what to expect,
You've been wanting, to hold me tight,
Bringing me home, with you tonight,
Candles are lit, wine is poured,
You, my baby, are the one I adore,
You're big brown eyes, just make me melt,
You give me the sweetest kisses, I've ever felt,
Holding me, and kissing me, while shutting the door,
You're slowly going to show me much, much more.....
A contest entry
- Seduce me by im dead - go away.
460 points, ended December 29, 2008, 18 entries
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Comments
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I liked how it ended, but
for this piece, I'd say ditch the rhyme scheme. It disrupted the flow, and felt a bit forced. Erotica needs to be very smooth.
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