It is humiliation to be seen with Santa Claus;
He is an essentially jolly man, yet has one immense flaw,
Vixen, Dancer, and Donner may agree...
Old’ St. Nick, ought to stop eating those sweets.
Author notes
Clerihew: Jolly, Vixen, Dancer, Donner, St.Nick
A contest entry
- Allpoetry Kids Christmas Bash 2008 (win a gold membership) by Little Eagle.
4200 points, ended January 11, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest :D
Comments
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This is a fun clerihew
I really like the way that you have used the wordbank words so seamlessly in this, and to make it a humour poem is great
Merry Christmas!
Polly
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A very nice clerihew you have made here.
I wonder if Santa Clause is fat guy here or not.
I guess he is!
What about changing the last line...
Old’ St. Nick ought to stop eating so much sweets?
Just a thought. Maybe you can think or an even better line.
Have another look please.
Anna.
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Thankyou! ; I corrected it.
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Santa probably does need a diet. Little typo in last line..."pees" should be "peas". Also, I think in the second line it should be an "essentially" jolly man. 
Cool clerihew! 
Best of luck in the contest.
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