i've been waiting
to step outside
in a world so wide
and look around
but im afraid
so i remain controlled
in my hole
under this mound
but i must leave
to explore
like never before
and hope to be safe and sound
so im waiting
taking my time
so i can unwind
and step out on open ground
just be patient
and maybe
you'll see me
cowering cause i can't be found
Author notes
this poem has a lot of meaning to it there are multiple ways you can apply this poem to real life. im not going to tell you because as a person it would have more meaning if you came up with a meaning yourself.
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what does this poem say to you? what does it make you think about?
Comments
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Very obvious feeling you are sharing and making your point very true and clear..and thanks for sharing it..well done indeed...
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I like that you don't give us a specific meaning, because you're right, there are so many.
I like this, I think it flows well, but the line "and hope to be safe and sound" sticks out in the flow of the poem a little too much for me. I don't mean to be overly critical, but I'm a bit of a nit-picker!
I like it!
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I think some of us hide ourselves because we are not sure enough to take control of our lies, the past holds us back but we need to burst out of the cocoon and become what we need to be, it's never easy but we can make people see us
C
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