She plays the violin making sweet music in the night
Dancing and twirling to the off beat melody.
Fans held high as to cast away the light.
Together then apart
Spirraling
Faster the melody
Likened to the screams of the insane shackled to walls
The violin screams its magical symphony
With a madness that threatens to take their humanity
Dancers unleash their staccato steps
Tango in the night
Legs flicking
and touching
Wilder now the music plays high pitched squealing
Madness in their eyes this night full moon rising
Skin turns to glossy furr
Teeth of ivory blurring in the frenzied dance
Dancing in the halls of insantity of the full moon nightmare
A contest entry
- Dancing In The Halls of Insanity.... by RareFlower.
625 points, ended December 11, 2008, 13 entries
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What did you think
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I like this poem. Great imagery, and very...mysterious. It didn't WOW me, but don't feel offended. It's hard to do it. Thanx 4 entering!!
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This really progressed well from beginning to to end and had excellent flow. I was quite captured by the themes, the tango, the violin and the werewolf references. The languge style was consistent and very clever in places.
"The violin screams its magical symphony
With a madness that threatens to take their humanity
Dancers unleash their staccato steps
Tango in the night"
I liked this part in particular, the violin is in my opinion the most haunting instrument and the reference here sent a melody whizzing through my brain. Very inspiring.
Thakyou very much for entering this into my contest.
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"Stickato" should be "Staccato". As a former music-student, this was just too big of a hole to get past.
An interesting idea, though the spelling-errors definitely turned me off a bit. Not bad, though... Good luck to you! -
sqwealing should be squealing
Some very nice imagery portrayed. Neat read, Thank you for entering and good luck 
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great with the prompt... it made me feel at first with the violin and dancing and night that i was in a dream with the music and twirling.... then it started getting out of control and i began entering the nightmare zone.
good job and good luck in the contest.
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Shudder.
This is an emotional poem with feelings of horror right through it. I like the way you relate the violin to insanity and the way the music reaches a crescendo to suit madness.
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Tango in the night
Wow what a wonderful use of the picture prompt. This is just what I am looking for.. Atmospheric and beautifully dark. Thank you for entering the contest.
RF
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