Nothin' yet is broken;
fragility hangs at every bough -
the night, just that night,
its significance unlikely
without day;
as is life without death.
Eyes pool, to the arid planes
of hate, and the heart recedes
to the finality in, goodbye.
there is still strength
in will; to reach higher
in mind, body and spirit.
To take a chance, even if
it splits us down the middle.
A contest entry
- Abstract Poetry #32 - WooDoo Master - by The Cube.
400 points, ended January 14, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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a good piece of poetry, aye one has to take a chance in love and life, even if it is difficult, without the chance there is no hope whatsoever, with the chance, hope may shine.
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This is a nice entry and strangely tranquil to me. I'm not sure how that is managed through this though... In any case, the perspective and representation shown in this poem from the image is very nice. I find it difficult to really put my finger on the explanation, but then again that is what I like about abstract work.
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Thank you for your honest assesment on my write. Very much has to do with being honest to ones feelings, even if it can cause pain and people around us uncomfortable when change takes place.
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This is clever and well constructed. I really enjoyed this read. Staying within a comfort zone is often the downfall of self growth and progress. Excellent.
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Awesome writing! Good luck in this contest!
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I loved the hope in this piece and the picture.. The reach for more despite hardships endured.
In my own interpretation a innuendo to lightning. “it splits us down the middle.” Striking without warning the angst to life. A contemplation write. Wonderful
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I like the last lines of this, last lines and first lines are usually the best in every poem and this one did not disappoint!!
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Powerful.. bleak possibilities, futures outlining reality and still an ever hopeful spirit as we step over fragility. . what could be. An amazingly crafted piece I haven't touched. Just the right balance.
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this is truly a departure from your norm, and i dare say a perfect example of an abstract piece of work so fitting for the contest requirements and the unique looking picture. well done peotess!
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Your title suggests that there is not need to fix it! Oh yes! This is abstract and filled with innuendoes that enlist the mind to ponder.
The comparison/contrast here are clever. This is a very finely crafted work of concrete poetry poet. I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Thanks Renee, just trying out something different.
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