Written long ago by the sages
when the comet came
the people will divide in two
then the troubled war began
Tall city people will be snobs
short country people sweet
talls flee from cities gone
short ones burn in the street
none of this had to be
when all live in unity
Author notes
Painting is by Wassily Kandinksy.
The name is Improvisation.
A contest entry
- Improvisation of the Abstract. . . by JinSays.
735 points, ended December 16, 2008, 12 entries
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Thank you for this entry.
There isnt a thing I would change about this write.
The thoughts that went into this run deep for me too.
Most fitting entry, I wish you the best.
Love,
Jin
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Everything was created for a reason and you capture just that, and how you remind us about living in unity, none of it had to be, or did it? Loved it.
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Thank You
Notheing is writting in stone till after the fact - and then that might not be truely how it happened. Killing doesn't need to happen - but it does.
Thaks again
W W
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Oh beautiful! I love how you related the concept of improvisation with diversity. Lovely take on the prompt!! Good luck in the contest!
All the best
Alyzeh
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Thank YOU
I live in a diverse world and don't understand why others can't accept differences. It is part of hwat makes life so rich yet all they see is ignorance and hatred. I am left to life and lead by example.
Thank You again
W W
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interesting take on the prompt WW. Kandinksy opens so many doors.
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Thank YOu
I'm not sure I have any doors or windows and if so they stay open - it's sometimes drafty and busy wiht all the things that pop into my head - but I'm never lonely - the voices are nice - lol
W W
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