brimming cups that cheer,
glasses half full,
and those almost
empty
have lain shattered
down the years;
metaphorical splinters
under ageing skin,
still able to
excise a nerve;
so why do I
now stand
in new shards,
deliberately thrown,
without my shoes..
Author notes
You see, one knows what one should do, but one is incapable of taking one's own advice.
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Oh shit!
firewalking again, are we?
But who knows, they say
that if you walk fast
and your feet are dry
You sometimes
don't get burned!
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after along time I am getting to vis ya and read ya.... terific this one.. so much uncoverd and exposed andas yet you do stand and function. Lovely poem and a excelelnt read. Please visit em and read my latest -
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Thanks hon. I am honoured. xx D
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Clever and well thought out, you clearly have an intelectual dole in worldy wisdom.
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. Will repay the compliment. Chrres, Chills x
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Thank you for this great read!!! Isn't hope a terrible thing? Without it, you can't get out of bed in the morning. With it, you leave yourself wide open for pain. So beautifully written.
Fondly,
Camille
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Thank you honey... yes, hope is a terrible thing..... but necessary! xx D
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It is like saying ..never again. Yet we do it anyway. The search goes on and we can only hope. Once there was a child. Then a girl/boy and then we grew up and became colder ever. Perhaps I am wrong. But deep write nevertheless.
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Not colder Bob, no, just never learning hard lessons... In fact, the warmer the feelings the more the shards seem to fall to the floor... and we just pick out the splinters. Thank you so much for taking the time to read this. love, chills xx
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true enough. And you sometimes get the feeling that it hardly matters that the shards are fine crystal or cheap plastic.
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Oh, my dear, yes... it hardly matters... the fine glass seems to work its way right under the skin though.... takes years to tweezer out... plastic is painful but transient! Thank you for your time. If you still like Richard Thompson, Cressida on Front Parlour Ballads has me in bits....... x Chills
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Put a shiver down my spine - Delicious
Suck in the pain and make sure hope does win...........................and go to the off-license.
Good Stuff
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thank you Gordon.
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i like my glass full
preferably not shattered
and then empty
and refilled
but probably without my shoes
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Again Interesting!
I feel the narrator is punishing him/herself for a willful imposed lonliness (love how each poem can create varied interpretation) Personally, I would leave out the word "metephorical" as it is poetically assumed to be anyway.
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I always see a glass half empty, as you might expect. But not for ****ing long provided a bottle is to hand and provided some other greedy ****er hasn't got there first.
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My sentiments exactly Barry dearest!! x Deb
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there is a touch
of magic in this. Reminds me of the 4 of cups in the tarot.
Loved it and in sad and maybe sadistuc way I am fond of the shards
K xxxx
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I think I must be too. Else why would I be so stubborn? Ouch..... Love to you, and keep your slippers on!! xx D
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You.
Rock.
WOW.
This is one of the greatest, most epic things I've read on this website or any.
It's personal but general enough for everyone to understand, the sort of beat of it is just phenominal, the rhyme is so natural, and the content! my god it's so true, so admirable... ahh...
I don't even know what to say.
Here is my highest praise (3 smiley faces with arms an awkward comment). You deserve it.
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Aw Dan, I don't deserve it, my lovely, but thanks so much. Promise me - don't do as I do, do as I say..... OK?! xx the mama (you know it makes sense!) x
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You DO deserve it. I don't think I can tell you what these words mean to me. Honestly I'll swear to whatever God or Gods you ask me to. You basically delivered the one lesson I need to learn the most in life in just stunning simplicity and beauty. I don't know why it's so important for me to know you understand that but it just is.
second.
I already do as you do, I have for years, and I've just now been learning to do as you say. And this helps. It really does.
thirdly
you know what to do it's just the doing that's the hard part. you can do it.
in the words of our country's new found optimism "YES WE CAN!" -
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yes, we can x
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It is our destiny to walk occasionally on broken glass. That's life, I suppose. I think I'd put an e in ageing, even although the Americans do without. Keep writing.
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Occasionally (treading on, etc etc) might be viewed as a mistake. But a loop? (Aw - well - auch - I think you know how badly I float without a rudder or basket baggage to jetison (just to mix a couple more metaphors.... sea and sky? WOW - I'm off ma heed the night) Serious downside nonsense. A HANDBAG? to make that mistake twice? Slap my face Mr Worthing. I feel that I can say all this nonsense to you and you will extrapolate ). Usually you come back and tell me to get a grip and calm down. And, of course, you are right. cheers keith - just ignore, OK?
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Keith, ma honey, you are such a santa to bring me a dictionary!! Seriously, thanks for this. Just crunching about without ma wee slippers, as per..... xx hope you are well and happy x debs x
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Barefoot and unrepentant! That's the way to do it, girl, up and at 'em again.
You are stronger than you think.
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Blimey!
That was quick. Thank you darling. Glasses (eye) and tweezers and just getting the splinters out x
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