He loved his car and drove it fast
A teenage spell on him was cast
Trying out his car on super speeds
Was one of his most choiciest deeds.
Once when on his neckbreaking rides
Our handsome hero was surprised
Hidden from view a cop caught him.
"I've waited for you all mornin'!"
Smiling wisely, our friend replied
"I came as fast as I could drive"
Our 'cop' was now the one surprised
Burst out laughing and ended crying
With tears in eyes he then opined
"You sure know how not to be fined"
"Go home my lad, don't speed again
It's not for me but your own gain
Your wit sure saved you one small fine
But can it do so if you're dyin' ?"
A contest entry
- Peer Pressure Contest!! You decide the trophy winners!! by Zenda-Lokki.
1700 points, ended January 7, 77 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
All suggestions are welcome.. special wrt my punctuation :)
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Witty
Hear the sirens! Just now a police car pulled over a hoon on the next street! I hope that cop has no sense of humour.
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nice message conveyed well in this one,,, thanks for sharing
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Have already commented on this poem so just a quick message to say Good luck in the contest hun xx
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Like this.. has an upbeat, jovial feel to it... and sure we have all had the policeman who has allowed us to go on without a ticket...
not sure "choicest" is a word, perhaps "carefree"
this had me smiling
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choicest is a dictionary word
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I stand corrected
Thanks, I learnt something today then 
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A nice touch of whimsy in your words light hearted and refreshing. I enjoy a fun read reflecting on real life. Happy trails neighbor.
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A light hearted and quite funny poem here x I liked the use of rhyming couplets, was a good form choice x Thanks for sharing it with us xx
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A good message put across in a light manner.
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This looks to me as an experience that you may never over come to, to even produce work of this nature, it must be close to home to even imagine, wow, this has feeling and realism within, and I would hate to even go through this, a lot of selfishness has been felt for the fear chapter even goess to saying that much reluctance to wishes represses much here to ones pleas, an almost deafness to yearnings.
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